Talk:Bengaluru FC/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Kosack (talk · contribs) 18:36, 4 March 2021 (UTC)

Taking this one on, review coming shortly. Kosack (talk) 18:36, 4 March 2021 (UTC)

Lead

 * No need to link Indian, per WP:OVERLINK.
 * There are quite a few references in the lead. Generally, if information is referenced in the body, it doesn't need to be sourced in the lead.
 * "Super Cup championship", is championship necessary here? A Super Cup is generally not considered a championship in my experience and would be fine listed as is.

Inception

 * There are a lot of sentences that began with "it was reported" or "it was rumoured", while the odd use can be acceptable, there are far to many here to really make the prose flow.
 * If you're using the same ref for the whole paragraph or long pieces of information, it's generally better to use it once at the end of what it's supporting rather than repeating it after each sentence.
 * "from corporate groups. Corporate groups", a little repetitive with the repeated usage.
 * "would construct new infrastructure", what infrastructure?
 * "at launch event at the Bangalore Football Stadium", sentence is a little jumbled.

Ashley Westwood era (2013–2016)

 * A similar issue here with sentence structure. A few uses of "it was announced" and a lot of the sentence begin with the same "On xx date" format which is a little repetitive.
 * I don't think Sporting are generally known as Sporting Portugal. Might be better using the Sporting CP name as the article does.
 * Bangalore Football Stadium is repeat linked here. Links should generally only appear once in the main body, per WP:OVERLINK.
 * "Bengaluru scored their first official goal", as this was their first official match, there's no need to list official here as well.
 * In the lead, you use the singular tense when referring to the club (its), but here the article has switched to the plural (thier). It's better to maintain consistency to avoid confusion.
 * "In their first losing away game", as it's the first away game there's no need for this really.
 * "winning their first trophy", can it be considered their first trophy if they won the I-League the previous year? Perhaps rephrase to cup competition or something similar.
 * The second half of this paragraph appears to be unsourced?
 * "the team also reached Round 16 for the AFC Cup", do you mean the round of 16 rather than round 16? Also for should be replaced by of here.
 * Last paragraph is also unsourced.

Albert Roca era and transition to Indian Super League (2016–2018)

 * "assistant coach Albert Roca as the head coach for two seasons", is this referring to his contract length? If so, I would rephrase to "head coach on a two-year contract".
 * "became the third Indian team to qualify for the tournament's semi-finals", is being the third team to do it particularly notable?
 * Pipe out the F.C. for Johor Darul Ta'zim F.C..
 * "losing the game 0–1", no need to use a reverse scoreline here for the first time. It's clear from the start of the sentence that it was a defeat.
 * The section header mentions a transition to the ISL, but there appears to be no mention of that. This is particularly confusing in the following section when the ISL is mentioned.
 * The end of the section is unsourced.

Carles Cuadrat era (2018–2021)

 * The majority of this paragraph doesn't appear to be sourced.
 * "Cuadret on mutual consent" > by mutual consent.
 * "poorest run" > runs.

Marco Pezzaiuoli era

 * Not specific to this section, but each heading in the history section is "manager era" which is a little repetitive.

Crest and colour

 * "Bengaluru FC' home livery", missing the s after FC here?
 * The last sentence could probably be integrated into the paragraph, single sentence paragraphs should generally be avoided.
 * Most of the kit table is unsourced.
 * "with Puma, which became the club's kit sponsor", the table lists Puma as the kit manufacturer rather than sponsor?
 * The second use of principal sponsor isn't needed.
 * The kit evolution gallery is unsourced.

Stadium

 * The Bangalore Footbal Stadium is overlinked twice in the first paragraph.

Supporters

 * No need to bold West Block Blues, only the title should be bolded.
 * "The players and the coach", what coach?
 * "at the India vs Guam game", when was this game played?

Rivalries

 * No need to link I-League again.
 * Ref 53 is oddy placed, any reason it's not at the end of the sentence?
 * What were the actions of the fans that caused the club to be fined?
 * I'm not sure the amount of headings is necessary for the smal amount of info in this section.

Performance in AFC competitions

 * Isn't this just repeating information that's already contained in the team records table?