Talk:Benjamin F. Lewis/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Sturmvogel 66 (talk · contribs) 21:09, 19 September 2019 (UTC)


 * comma after Georgia
 * Done


 * On the other hand, he was well known for his propensities for corruption to the extent that his murder had many suspects. awkward
 * Rephrased
 * Better, but corruption is not an adjective. Corrupt is an adjective.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 03:46, 20 September 2019 (UTC)
 * I said "corrupt" in the lead, if I'm not mistaken.


 * link to West Side, Chicago, link precinct captain, election judge, county court, South Side, ward committeeman, Roosevelt Road
 * Done
 * A better link for county court would be to Circuit Court of Cook County--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 03:46, 20 September 2019 (UTC)
 * Done


 * Capitalize all of United States Unemployment Service as a proper name and de-capitalize second lieutenant as it's not a proper name. Link both terms
 * Capitalization done, ditto w/ lieutenant link. The Unemployment Service does not have an article AFAIK.


 * De-capitalize Housing Inspector
 * Done


 * Throughout his tenure, he encountered yet another irregularity rephrase, not clear
 * Rephrased
 * Better, but still passive voice; Lewis made those choices, so he didn't fall into anything.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 03:46, 20 September 2019 (UTC)
 * More rephrasing


 * He would reach tense, "reached"
 * Done


 * he replied that "I stand right at Kedzie and Roosevelt in my ward." What does this mean?
 * Presumably indifference


 * liked to be known substitute "called" for "known"
 * Done


 * He had moved into the office the day before. Awkward, combine with the first sentence in the paragraph
 * Done


 * and having been shot three times tense, "had been shot"
 * Done


 * filed against them on the matter delete "on the matter"
 * Done


 * Lewis's tendency to engage in corruption passive voice, he didn't engage in corruption, he was corrupt.
 * Done


 * would remain vacant tense; "remained vacant"
 * Done


 * Image appropriately licensed
 * No DABs, external links OK
 * Copyvio acceptable at 27.4%--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 21:09, 19 September 2019 (UTC)
 * Thank you for starting the review. I shall address your concerns shortly. – John M Wolfson (talk • contribs) 21:29, 19 September 2019 (UTC)
 * , I believe that's everyone you've said so far. Let me know if you have any more questions! – John M Wolfson (talk • contribs) 22:14, 19 September 2019 (UTC)
 * A few issues with using passive voice remain.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 03:46, 20 September 2019 (UTC)
 * I have attempted to resolve those issues; please let me know if you have any more specific issues that you need fixed. – John M Wolfson (talk • contribs) 22:30, 21 September 2019 (UTC)