Talk:Benjamin Loxley/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Kevin1776 (talk · contribs) 20:55, 10 March 2021 (UTC)

I am willing to review this article and help get it to Good Article status. A quick perusal suggests there may be some factual issues regarding Loxley's military service. The infobox says: 1750–1755 (British Army), 1775–1780 (Continental Army), but the text of the article provides no evidence that Loxley was a member of either of those organizations. Serving with Braddock in 1755 didn't make one a soldier of the British Army; serving in state or militia units during the American Revolution didn't make you a member of the Continental Army. I'm guessing Loxley belonged to the militia in both cases, rather than the Army. Clarification needed. Kevin1776 (talk) 20:55, 10 March 2021 (UTC)


 * It appears Loxley's interesting military career is referenced in this book: Seymour, Joseph. The Pennsylvania Associators, 1747-1777. United States, Westholme Publishing, LLC, 2012. I'm guessing from the snippets I've seen that Loxely was not a part of Braddock's expedition. Rather, he was a part of the militia that was formed as a result of Braddock's defeat. It appears he took part in local defenses during the 1764 march on Philadelphia of the Paxton Boys. Kevin1776 (talk) 21:16, 10 March 2021 (UTC)
 * ✅ - removed him from the organizations in the infobox. --Doug Coldwell (talk) 21:18, 10 March 2021 (UTC)


 * Actually, the infobox still says he was a Lieutenant (British Army) and a Major (Continental Army). Was he?
 * Yes, the reference sources seem to indicate this to me.--Doug Coldwell (talk) 11:09, 15 March 2021 (UTC)


 * The section on the "American Revolution" is, I'm afraid, somewhat incoherent from a historical standpoint. You have him joining the American "independence movement" after Braddock's defeat in 1755, which is about 20 years too early.
 * Where I got that idea was from the reference source where it says, During both the French and Indian War and the Revolution, he served as an officer of artillery and recruited heavily for the American cause among the building trades. The French and Indian War starts in 1754. Braddock's defeat was in 1755. Yes = any guidance from you would be appreciated, as I certainly am not an expert in this area.--Doug Coldwell (talk) 12:00, 15 March 2021 (UTC)


 * Don't worry, I can help you straighten that out. I just noticed this paper online about Loxley's military career which will help us do that: https://americansocietyofarmscollectors.org/wp-content/uploads/2019/06/2006-B93-Light-the-Match-Load-Away-The-Ordnance-a.pdf Kevin1776 (talk) 08:12, 15 March 2021 (UTC)
 * Thanks for any help you can provide on this. I can see you are more tuned into this than I am.--Doug Coldwell (talk) 11:09, 15 March 2021 (UTC)
 * I've sorted it out for the most part. I'm not sure if Loxley's unit was adopted into the Continental Army or just served along with it, but I think we've got enough here for a Good Article. Good work. Kevin1776 (talk) 01:35, 16 March 2021 (UTC)