Talk:Benson raft/GA2

GA Review
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Reviewer: Hog Farm (talk · contribs) 16:10, 9 June 2020 (UTC)

Criteria
1. Prose

2. Verifiability

3. Depth of Coverage ✅

4. Neutral ✅

5. Stable ✅

6. Illustrations ✅

7. Miscellaneous ✅

Comments
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 * " Southern California from the Pacific northwest and Canada." - capitalize Northwest and link Pacific Northwest. It's a specific region
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:07, 9 June 2020 (UTC)


 * "t was a transportation method to transport industrial quantities" - It's a touch repetitive to write "transportation method to transport", how does The rafts were used to transport industrial quantities ... sound?
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:12, 9 June 2020 (UTC)


 * "John A. Fastaben was the key raft-building specialist that Benson hired as a construction supervisor" - First mention of Benson in the lead, probably best to give his full name at first mention
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:17, 9 June 2020 (UTC)


 * Be consistent with Southern California vs. southern California, I can see an argument for either capitalization
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:23, 9 June 2020 (UTC)


 * " open ocean on the west Coast of the United States" - Either west coast or West Coast
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:23, 9 June 2020 (UTC)


 * " Columbia river inland from the Pacific coast" - Capitalize River
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:27, 9 June 2020 (UTC)


 * "traveling only thirty miles south into" - Use the Convert template to get kms, too
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:38, 9 June 2020 (UTC)


 * "assembled consisted of fir logs" - Link fir
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:38, 9 June 2020 (UTC)


 * " in the Pacific ocean" --> " in the Pacific Ocean"
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:38, 9 June 2020 (UTC)


 * "anywhere from 4 to 6 weeks to assemble" - MOS:NUMERALS
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:41, 9 June 2020 (UTC)

2.
 * "The assembly involved 175 to 250 tons of chain" - Source states 125 tons.
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:41, 9 June 2020 (UTC)


 * "http://archiveswest.orbiscascade.org/ark:/80444/xv31893/op=fstyle.aspx?t=k&q=WAUFordJFPHColl701.xml" is the correct URL for ref 22.
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk)


 * Ref 28 should be capitalilzed "Journal of Forest History", not "Journal of forest history"
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk)

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A little work that needs done, but very good work on improving this article since the first review. Hog Farm (talk) 17:48, 9 June 2020 (UTC)
 * All issues have been addressed. Can you take another look. Thanks. --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:49, 9 June 2020 (UTC)
 * - Passing the article. Heads up - you'll probably get a message on your talk page stating that it failed, though.  There's a bug with the bot that runs the GAN stuff that causes it to read a pass when the article failed a previous review as a fail. Hog Farm (talk) 20:14, 9 June 2020 (UTC)