Talk:Bentworth/GA3

GA Review
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Reviewer: Malleus Fatuorum 19:26, 17 November 2010 (UTC)

There are several problems with this article, which still needs a lot of work before it's listed as a GA I'm afraid. I suggest reading through WikiProject UK geography/How to write about settlements to see what additional information is needed to meet the "covers the subject's major topics" requirement for GA. I also think that looking at articles on comparable areas such as Chew Stoke or Navenby will give you some ideas of how best to organise the material and the stuff that's missing, like Governance, Economy, Education, and so on.


 * Prose
 * There are innumerable problems with the prose. Someone needs to go through the entire article copyediting it. A few examples:
 * "Such as a Stone Age implement Mesolithic Thames was picked up near a field by Childer Hill in 1942."
 * "The Tripartite cinerary urn contained a cremation of an adult." It couldn't possibly contain a cremation.
 * "Belgic pottery and animal bones found in face of Quarry in Holt End, 1954 and Roman coins found near Tinkers Lane."
 * "Also fine pottery, bone objects, spindle-whorls and fragments of Roman roofing tiles was found in Wivelrod."
 * "Bentworth Hall itself can date back to the late 10th century and its manors and houses has been passed on countless times."
 * "One time Bentworth Hall was in the reign of King John, January 1207–8, Peter des Roches, Bishop of Winchester, was granted temporary possession of the manor of Bentworth." I've got no idea what that means.
 * "This theory is yet unknown, but the source is actually in Alton." The theory is unknown? How do you know about it then?
 * "The main passing point from Basing to Winchester was ceased as a new road was built around the valley of the villages Bentworth and Lasham."
 * "With an outbreak of World War II the village was in desperate need for houses." Makes the Second World war sound like a bout of influenza.
 * "Today, the railway station has left its marks by the construction of five houses which were used for the railway workers." What does that mean?
 * "This name theory lies provable because even today Jennie Green Lane has a dead end to it ...". What does "lies provable mean?


 * Lead
 * We're told in the first paragraph that "it" covers an area of 3,763 acres, and in the second than the parish occupies an area of 5.5 square miles. Is the "it" in the first paragraph referring just to the village, which presumably gave its name to the parish? The switch from acreage to square miles is rather discordant in any event.


 * "It has two pubs, the Star Inn[2] and the Sun Inn ...". What has two pubs, the parish or the village? Why is a third pub (now closed) relevant? Is this really significant enough to be included in the lead, especially as neither of these pubs are mentioned in the body of the article?


 * "At over 700 feet (210 m) above sea level, Bentworth is counted as the highest village in Hampshire." Counted? Is it or isn't it?

This needs to be more than just a couple of graphics showing neighbouring settlements. What's the elevation, the underlying bedrock? What about Benworth's climate?
 * Geography


 * Notable people
 * This section needs to be recast as prose, instead of a bulleted list.

This article needs such a lot of work that my assessment is that it would be better to bring this article back to GAN once all of the issues identified have been addressed. Malleus Fatuorum 23:01, 17 November 2010 (UTC)