Talk:Bestia Salvaje/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 20:18, 8 May 2020 (UTC)

Shall be reviewing this article as part of the GAN Backlog Drive of April to May 2020. MWright96 (talk) 20:18, 8 May 2020 (UTC)
 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * Pass/Fail:

Lead

 * Delink Mexico per MOS:OVERLINK
 * "A second-generation wrestler, he was the son of Espectro II and the brother of Corazón Salvaje as well as the brother-in-law of Charrito de Oro." - he was the son of Espectro II, the brother of Corazón Salvaje and the brother-in-law of Charrito de Oro
 * Try not to put citations in the lead per MOS:CITELEAD and put it in the body of the article at the appropriate place

Personal life

 * "He is the son of Espectro II" - needs a period to end this sentence

Consejco Mundial de Lucha Libre (1987–2004)

 * "Bestia Salvaje defeated Águila Solitaria to win the Mexican National Welterweight Championship, the first championship of his career." - title
 * "("bet match" hair vs. hair match," - the second parentheses is needed here
 * "After the team broke up," - disbanded is more formal

Los Chacales (1995–1996)

 * "becoming the sixth overall championship team." - winning
 * "Los Chacales' reign as CMLL World Trios Champions lasted almost a year, 357 days," - lasted 357 days,
 * "Bestia Salvaje teamed up with Chicago Express defeating Dos Caras and Bronco, El Hijo del Santo and Olímpico, and Atlantis and Atlantico in the tournament finals to win the tournament." - repetition of the word "tournament"
 * "before being eliminated by the Great Sasuke in the semi-finals." - The Great Sasuke

Bestia and Scorpio Jr. (1996–1999)

 * "During the match it looked like El Felino turned on his brother," - appeared that
 * "allowing Bestia Salvaje and Scorpio Jr. to beat up Negro Casas." - defeat
 * "El Felino pulled his mask off," - removed his mask,
 * "on November 13, 1998." - the period is not needed here
 * "in a tournament." - which tournament?
 * "which lead to a match on February 5, 1999" - led
 * "Casas and Hijo del Santo won the match by disqualification and thus the championship as well, but refused to accept the belts due to how the match ended." - repetition of the word "match"

Los Guapos (1999–2002)

 * "In the following months," - please state if possible how many months exactly
 * "and looked down on anyone who was not as handsome as he was." - despite those who were less handsome than him.
 * "2000 Shocker was invited to work" - In 2000, Shocker
 * "Over the following months," - how many months preciesly?
 * "without a partner for Trios matches, their solution was to bring in another veteran Emilio Charles Jr. to become the fourth Guapo team member," - the two commas should be replaced by separate period and the word "their" begin with a capital letter
 * "forcing Charles to have all his hair shaved off as a result of his loss." - because he lost. for variety

Los Talibanes (2002–2004)

 * Delink terrorist per MOS:OVERLINK
 * "over the following years," - how many years exactly?

International Wrestling Revolution Group (2000–2007)

 * "A month later he defeated Cyborg in a Lucha de Apuestas match, leaving Cyborg bald as a result." - repetition of "Cyborg"