Talk:Beverly White/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Aussie Article Writer (talk · contribs) 02:39, 17 July 2021 (UTC)

Discussion

 * though it will not affect this GA, the following source says that she won a multitude of awards. Can we not include this in the article? This source says that she is Vice-Chairman of the Murray-Jordan-Toole Mental Health Centro, a member of the Juvenile Court Advisory Board, and a member of the LEPA Advisory Council. Same situation, can this not be included? - Aussie Article Writer (talk) 03:27, 17 July 2021 (UTC)
 * an excellent article, I can definitely see this is on the cusp of being a good article! Could you address my concerns? - Aussie Article Writer (talk) 04:08, 17 July 2021 (UTC)
 * Thank you for your review and I will get to the issues soon. Jon698 (talk) 04:23, 17 July 2021 (UTC)
 * I have finally gotten to fixing the problems you had with the article and I will explain why I didn't do some of them. The "She served as the board's chair from 1989 to 1991" is in reference to the Tooele Valley Medical Center Special Service District Board which was mentioned in the previous sentence. I also really wanted to find a place to put the capitol punishment support into when originally writing the article, but couldn't so I decided to leave it out rather than just have one sentence sticking out at the very top. Jon698 (talk) 09:21, 21 July 2021 (UTC)
 * Sorry about forgetting to mention the awards part. I chose to not include those since they weren't really notable awards and most are repetitive. Jon698 (talk) 09:22, 21 July 2021 (UTC)
 * May I make a suggestion? Just make political positions one section and include hey death penalty views in that section. - Aussie Article Writer (talk) 09:29, 21 July 2021 (UTC)
 * What about “ She also helped establish the Children’s Justice Center in Tooele and worked for the Tooele Adult Probation and Parole Office until she retired at the age of 78. White also served as a member of the Governor’s Commission on the Status of Women (1986–1993)”? - Aussie Article Writer (talk) 16:58, 21 July 2021 (UTC)


 * I feel this is very close to GA stays, but there is still one referencing issue that needs attention, and if we could fix the minor NPOV issue, then I think we are almost there. We do need to note her position on capital punishment for completeness. - Aussie Article Writer (talk) 17:16, 21 July 2021 (UTC)
 * Done. I found a way to mention her capital punishment support in a way I liked. I also fixed the close citations thing and added in your suggestion. BTW thank you for introducing me to WIG. Jon698 (talk) 17:41, 21 July 2021 (UTC)
 * not a problem, I think your skills will really be welcomed by WiG! I am extremely happy to tell you that you have addressed all the concerns and this is now a GA! Well done Jon, you have helped improve another fantastic article to the Wikipedia corpus. - Aussie Article Writer (talk) 18:02, 21 July 2021 (UTC)