Talk:Bianca Andreescu/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 17:16, 1 April 2020 (UTC)

Taking this review as part of the GAN Backlog Drive of April to May 2020. MWright96 (talk) 17:16, 1 April 2020 (UTC)
 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * Pass/Fail:

Lead

 * "is a Canadian professional tennis player, of Romanian origin." - the comma is unneeded
 * Removed the last part, as it doesn't belong. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 21:10, 1 April 2020 (UTC)
 * "and is the highest-ranked Canadian in the history of the Women's Tennis Association (WTA) rankings." - the word "rankings" is not necessary I feel
 * Removed. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 21:10, 1 April 2020 (UTC)
 * "has been widely regarded as "fun to watch"." - pleaese state exactly who regards Andreescu's play as "fun to watch" in the lead for clarity
 * Clarified "tennis commentators and journalists" Sportsfan77777 (talk) 21:10, 1 April 2020 (UTC)

Early life and background

 * Her birth date is not mentioned by The Globe and Mail but the WTA Tennis bio of her does. The WTA Tennis source will have to be used to cite the information in the prose
 * Added. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 21:16, 1 April 2020 (UTC)
 * "Andreescu began playing tennis in Pitești at the age of seven while living in Romania." - not mentioned by The Globe and Mail. In this instance, swap it for the source that explicitly states this information and move The Globe and Mail source to the sentence this precedes this one
 * Rearranged. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 21:16, 1 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Also the words "while living in Romania" are redundant since it is mentioned earlier in the paragraph that she and her family had returned to Romania when she was six years old
 * Removed. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 21:16, 1 April 2020 (UTC)
 * "U14 National Training Centre in Toronto operated by Tennis Canada." - how about Tennis Canada-run U14 National Training Centre in Toronto. instead?
 * I don't like hyphenating "Canada-run" when "Tennis Canada" is the full name. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 21:16, 1 April 2020 (UTC)

Junior career

 * "becoming the fourth straight Canadian to win that event." - the fourth Canadian in a row
 * Changed. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 21:33, 1 April 2020 (UTC)
 * The first three sentences require an reference to verify since the Montreal Gazette does not mention any of it
 * Added ITF profile as a reference. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 21:33, 1 April 2020 (UTC)
 * "in back-to-back years since Mary Joe Fernández in 1984 and 1985.[11][5]" - refs in numerical order please
 * Fixed. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 21:56, 1 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Wikilink adductor to its respective article
 * Added. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 21:33, 1 April 2020 (UTC)
 * "The pair defeated the Polish team of Maja Chwalińska and Iga Świątek in the Australian Open final, and the Russian team" - try to avoid using the same word of team in the same sentence
 * I did it for consistency. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 21:33, 1 April 2020 (UTC)

2015–18: First ITF titles, WTA doubles final

 * Wikilink the first mention of the term wild cards to Wild card (sport) to help those unfamiliar with sport
 * Added. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 21:34, 1 April 2020 (UTC)

2019: First Premier Mandatory title, teenage US Open champion, world No. 4

 * "Andreescu had a breakthrough season that took from well outside the top 100 into the upper echelon of women's tennis." - took her
 * Fixed Sportsfan77777 (talk) 21:56, 1 April 2020 (UTC)
 * "She became the first wild card to" - there is some words missing here
 * It seems fine. Did you mean somewhere else? Sportsfan77777 (talk) 21:56, 1 April 2020 (UTC)
 * No I mean this particular portion of text. MWright96 (talk) 06:40, 2 April 2020 (UTC)
 * "win the event in tournament history and was the first 18-year-old to win the event since Serena Williams in 1999." - repetition of the word event
 * Changed first to "women's singles champion" Sportsfan77777 (talk) 21:52, 1 April 2020 (UTC)
 * "She became the first Canadian tennis player to win a Grand Slam singles title, and the first teenager to win a Grand Slam singles title" - know it might be difficult but a slight rewording would help to avoid close repetition of the same word(s)
 * Changed to "teenage Grand Slam singles champion" Sportsfan77777 (talk) 21:52, 1 April 2020 (UTC)
 * "having received 66 (97%) of the 68 votes cast" - per cent per MOS:PERCENT
 * Cut a lot of this paragraph, as it was added by someone else. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 21:52, 1 April 2020 (UTC)

2020: Struggle with injuries

 * "Andreescu missed the Australian Open due to left knee injury." - due to a left knee injury.
 * "Andreescu, who was the defending champion of Indian Wells, pulled out due to her continued left knee injury," - the incorrect wikilinking in this portion of text needs to be addressed
 * "before the tournament was suspended due to coronavirus." - cancelled due to the 2019–20 coronavirus pandemic.
 * The second sentence is unreferenced and will require a reliable citation to verify it
 * Rewrote the whole section. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 22:43, 1 April 2020 (UTC)

National representation

 * "they needed to win their round robin pool, win a tie against the other round robin pool winner, and then win another tie in the play-off round" - too many uses of the word "win" in the same sentence
 * Changed first part to "finish first in". Sportsfan77777 (talk) 21:56, 1 April 2020 (UTC)
 * "They lost the first three singles rubbers to lose the tie," - repetition of the word lost(e)
 * Changed to "and" Sportsfan77777 (talk) 21:56, 1 April 2020 (UTC)
 * "and keep them in World Group II the following year."- for the following year.
 * Done. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 21:56, 1 April 2020 (UTC)

Playing style

 * Wikilink forehand, topspin, backhand and drop shot2 to their respective articles
 * Done. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 22:30, 1 April 2020 (UTC)
 * A link to The New Yorker and Wall Street Journal would help
 * Added. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 22:30, 1 April 2020 (UTC)

Coaches

 * "did not need to leave home to train.[73][14]" - references in numerical order please
 * Fixed. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 21:57, 1 April 2020 (UTC)