Talk:Big King/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Sainsf (talk · contribs) 05:46, 6 March 2016 (UTC)

Hi, I will take this one. Sainsf &lt;^&gt; Talk all words 05:46, 6 March 2016 (UTC)

Lead
✅ Sainsf  &lt;^&gt; Talk all words 11:55, 6 March 2016 (UTC)
 * Can we link hamburger? Looks like an important link for this article
 * - 10:32, 6 March 2016 (UTC)


 * Could the article be more illustrated? For example, with images related to the two companies?
 * - See what I can do. Jeremy (blah blah • I did it!) 10:39, 6 March 2016 (UTC)
 * -Jeremy (blah blah • I did it!) 11:16, 6 March 2016 (UTC)

Initial product run
✅ Sainsf  &lt;^&gt; Talk all words 18:04, 6 March 2016 (UTC)
 * The company's take on the well-known You have not mentioned Burger King yet in the main text. Link it as well - links repeated from the lead are not a problem
 * -10:37, 6 March 2016 (UTC)


 * Link McDonald's
 * -10:37, 6 March 2016 (UTC)


 *  where rival McDonald's  I think the "rival" fact should be mentioned when you first introduce McDonald's. This is its second mention
 * -10:37, 6 March 2016 (UTC)


 * Could we link "caloric content?
 * - To what? Jeremy (blah blah • I did it!) 10:37, 6 March 2016 (UTC)
 * May be to food energy? Calorie covers it only as a unit. Linking is not necessary, just an idea. Sainsf  &lt;^&gt; Talk all words 10:43, 6 March 2016 (UTC)
 * -17:19, 6 March 2016 (UTC)


 * Italics for "Chicago Tribune"?
 * -10:37, 6 March 2016 (UTC)


 *  newer sandwich's ingredients were of better quality than the McDonald's product -->  ingredients of the newer sandwich were of better quality than those of the McDonald's product.
 * -10:38, 6 March 2016 (UTC)

BK Stackers
✅ Sainsf  &lt;^&gt; Talk all words 11:55, 6 March 2016 (UTC)
 * Stacker sauce served on a sesame seed bun "sesame seed bun" is mentioned in the earlier section, it should be linked only there
 * 11:15, 6 March 2016 (UTC)


 * Chowhound.com readers rated the Quad Stacker How reliable is this website? What exactly is it for?
 * - Chowhound is food and restaurant review site run by American media company CBS Interactive.


 *  the Impulsive Buy  What is this?
 * - The Impulsive Buy is a long running review blog that focuses on fast food. It has been running for more than a decade now. about -Jeremy (blah blah • I did it!) 11:15, 6 March 2016 (UTC)


 *  in the three months ended Sept. 30 I have generally seen months written in full words.
 * 11:15, 6 March 2016 (UTC)


 * didn't scale at the same rate as increasing numbers  "didn't" may be expanded
 * 11:15, 6 March 2016 (UTC)

-Jeremy (blah blah • I did it!) 11:26, 6 March 2016 (UTC)

BK Toppers
✅ Sainsf  &lt;^&gt; Talk all words 18:04, 6 March 2016 (UTC)
 * The BK Toppers line was a line of cheeseburgers introduced in October 2011 Please add the company name when you begin a section
 * -17:28, 6 March 2016 (UTC)


 * The 1st para is unsourced
 * -11:28, 6 March 2016 (UTC)


 * Could "sauteed mushrooms" be linked?
 * According to the guidelines on wikilinking, common terms such as mushrooms should not be linked unless there is compelling reason to do so. However, I will link sauteing as some people may be unfamiliar with the term. --Jeremy (blah blah • I did it!) 17:28, 6 March 2016 (UTC)
 * Thanks. That will do. Sainsf  &lt;^&gt; Talk all words 18:04, 6 March 2016 (UTC)


 * beyond the 18- to 34-year-old demographic  This wording looks better than the "young men aged 20–34 " from the previous section
 * -17:28, 6 March 2016 (UTC)

Reintroduction
✅ Sainsf  &lt;^&gt; Talk all words 18:12, 6 March 2016 (UTC)
 * Could "chicken strips" be linked?
 * -17:38, 6 March 2016 (UTC)


 *  A chicken variant introduced in May 2014. Should "was" be added or is something missing?
 * -17:38, 6 March 2016 (UTC)


 * Link Middle East
 * -17:38, 6 March 2016 (UTC)


 * because of a new approach by the company was taking regarding new and LTO products Is it a typo or is something missing? LTO should be explained here, not in the next section.
 * - the term was explained in the lead, however I did not define the term in the body of the article. --Jeremy (blah blah • I did it!) 17:38, 6 March 2016 (UTC)
 * I see. Better. Sainsf  &lt;^&gt; Talk all words 18:12, 6 March 2016 (UTC)


 * Say either reintroduction or re-introduction
 * -17:38, 6 March 2016 (UTC)


 *  The idea of reintroducing older, possibly discontinued products is appealing to companies ... their kitchen operations. Could be shortened and/or reworded so that it looks like original research and does not deviate from the main topic.
 * - The sentence is a run-on, I fixed that. I don't understand what you mean by OR. --Jeremy (blah blah • I did it!) 17:43, 6 March 2016 (UTC)
 * Better. Sainsf  &lt;^&gt; Talk all words 18:12, 6 March 2016 (UTC)

Competitive products
✅ Sainsf  &lt;^&gt; Talk all words 18:13, 6 March 2016 (UTC)
 * I think this section repeats some facts from the earlier sections (like the Big Mac), could it be merged into them?
 * ❌ - the opening sentence is the only part that restates the Big Mac connection, and it states this to acknowledge the earlier statement before expanding on other products from vendors other than McDonald's that compete with the Big King.
 * Oh, I see. Sainsf  &lt;^&gt; Talk all words 18:13, 6 March 2016 (UTC)


 * Whopper is a duplink
 * -17:51, 6 March 2016 (UTC)

Product description
✅ Sainsf  &lt;^&gt; Talk all words 18:14, 6 March 2016 (UTC)
 * This section could be renamed simply as "Description"
 * ❌ - This is a standard format for these articles. Please see other, similar articles such as Whopper and BK Chicken Fries. --<span style="font-family:lucida sans, sans-serif;">Jeremy <small style="font-size:85%;">(blah blah • I did it!) 18:04, 6 March 2016 (UTC)
 * Sorry, didn't know. Sainsf  &lt;^&gt; Talk all words 18:14, 6 March 2016 (UTC)


 * Duplinks: beef, sesame seed, bun
 * -18:04, 6 March 2016 (UTC)


 * No bold is needed in this section. Bold is generally not used in the article but I believe it should be kept in the earlier sections for the sake of emphasis; but it is not so important here. You may use bullets instead
 * ❌ - See comment above. --<span style="font-family:lucida sans, sans-serif;">Jeremy <small style="font-size:85%;">(blah blah • I did it!) 18:04, 6 March 2016 (UTC)


 * The plan was part of Burger King CEO, Alex Macedo What does this mean?
 * - bad wording, I fixed it. --<span style="font-family:lucida sans, sans-serif;">Jeremy <small style="font-size:85%;">(blah blah • I did it!) 18:04, 6 March 2016 (UTC)


 * 1/2 pound double Burger King Convert?
 * -18:04, 6 March 2016 (UTC)


 * The Mushroom & Swiss Big King This has an image here. Where is this burger discussed?
 * -I expanded the description of the image to tie it into the section. --<span style="font-family:lucida sans, sans-serif;">Jeremy <small style="font-size:85%;">(blah blah • I did it!) 18:04, 6 March 2016 (UTC)

Advertising
✅ Sainsf  &lt;^&gt; Talk all words 08:44, 7 March 2016 (UTC)
 * Link Ammirati Puris Lintas at first mention
 * - no article on English Wikipedia, changed to parent group interpublic. -<span style="font-family:lucida sans, sans-serif;">Jeremy <small style="font-size:85%;">(blah blah • I did it!) 07:40, 7 March 2016 (UTC)


 * were the result of the of comparatively strong sales year in 1996  Errors?
 * -07:40, 7 March 2016 (UTC)


 * a national TV program from Ammirati Puris Lintas  Say television
 * -07:40, 7 March 2016 (UTC)


 * that debuted on September 1st. Mention the year
 * - the year is mentioned in the section header. --<span style="font-family:lucida sans, sans-serif;">Jeremy <small style="font-size:85%;">(blah blah • I did it!) 07:40, 7 March 2016 (UTC)


 * except it's got 75 percent more beef Say % or percent throughout the article
 * -07:40, 7 March 2016 (UTC)


 * The 30 second ads were for both the King  dash?
 * -07:40, 7 March 2016 (UTC)


 * The British and German ad program for a limited time offering (LTO)  Don't explain LTO again
 * -07:40, 7 March 2016 (UTC)


 * was not translated into German Link German
 * -07:40, 7 March 2016 (UTC)