Talk:Big Sky (song)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Speatle (talk · contribs) 15:10, 22 May 2022 (UTC)

I’ll review this, I guess. I’ll most likely use a review style similar to yours.

Lead

 * “Davies composed the song in January 1968 in Cannes, France…” Probably really nitpicky, but this (and the first sentence in Background and Composition) seems a bit repetitive.
 * What exactly is repetitive?
 * An “in” prepositional phrase is used twice in a row, which I think really messes with the flow, but I bolded to make it clearer.
 * Ah, I see what you mean. Is this better? Ray Davies composed "Big Sky" in January 1968 while visiting Cannes, France.
 * Yeah, that looks much better. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Speatle (talk • contribs) 20:10, 30 May 2022 (UTC)


 * “The Kinks recorded it in October 1968, making it among the last songs recorded for Village Green.” < “The Kinks recorded it in October 1968, making it one of the last songs recorded for Village Green.” scratch this, the original was fine.
 * “Though Davies later disparaged his vocals and the song's production…” I’m assuming this is Ray, but maybe make it a bit clearer which brother it is.
 * The way it's written follows MOS:SAMESURNAME, since the article almost exclusively refers only to Ray.
 * Good to know.


 * Infobox looks fine.

Background and Composition

 * “Davies later explained that watching the businessmen from his hotel made him imagine "a being somewhat bigger than all the hustlers around me,"” explained should be changed to said, per MOS:SAID.
 * Fixed.


 * “…the resulting lyrics are instead "more about the struggle of ordinary humans beings surviving in the modern world." Typo.
 * Where exactly?
 * ”humans beings.” If this was originally there, then put a sic.
 * Ah, I missed that. It was a typo on my end. Fixed.


 * “Miller similarly writes the song finds solace in the indifference of God, since, compared to the Big Sky, humans' issues are small.” Second comma is unneeded.
 * Fixed.

Retrospective assessment

 * “In a retrospective assessment, critic Rick Clark of the All Music Guide describes "Big Sky" as one of Village Green's highlights…” Should this be changed to Allmusic given that’s what it’s called now? Later in the article, it’s referred to as Allmusic, so we should keep consistent.
 * The title of the book is the All Music Guide – changing the name here would be anachronistic, something discouraged with place names for example (MOS:PLACE). I've tweaked it to instead clarify the new name in a parenthetical.
 * It was fine as it was. Speatle  ( talk to me )( read all about it )  please ping me when replying to something I said . 20:52, 30 May 2022 (UTC)

Critical reception

 * “He writes that, while "Big Sky" deals less in specific characters than in larger "statements and questions"…” unneeded comma.
 * Fixed.

Other versions

 * “American musician Matthew Sweet recorded a cover the song…” missing word.
 * Fixed.

Overall

 * Ref formats seem to alternate between harvnb and sfn, pick one or the other.
 * Preference of reference style is beyond the scope of a GA review (WP:GANOT). The style used here is also entirely consistent with both WP:SRF and WP:BUNDLING and is used at many FAs.
 * Oh, sorry, for some reason I thought it was. Speatle  ( talk to me )( read all about it )  please ping me when replying to something I said . 10:55, 31 May 2022 (UTC)

Thanks, responses posted above.  Tkbrett  (✉) 16:13, 28 May 2022 (UTC)
 * Sorry for being slow on the actual review bit, I’ll try to speed things up soon. Speatle  ( talk to me )( read all about it )  please ping me when replying to something I said . 18:02, 28 May 2022 (UTC)
 * No worries, there's no rush.  Tkbrett  (✉) 23:10, 28 May 2022 (UTC)
 * The review’s finished, and I can’t find anything else to complain about. This article passes. Speatle  ( talk to me )( read all about it )  please ping me when replying to something I said . 11:34, 31 May 2022 (UTC)