Talk:Bilbo Baggins/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: JavaHurricane (talk · contribs) 08:06, 19 May 2020 (UTC)

I'll be happy to review Bilbo's entry.  Java Hurricane  08:06, 19 May 2020 (UTC)


 * Many thanks for taking this on. Chiswick Chap (talk) 08:33, 19 May 2020 (UTC)
 * , no problems!  Java Hurricane  08:39, 19 May 2020 (UTC)
 * I'm currently actively reviewing.  Java Hurricane  06:47, 24 May 2020 (UTC)

Status
 Good article

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Comments

 * I'd appreciate an expansion of the first paragraph of the lead - one sentence is not enough for so important a character.
 * Done.


 * Also, I think the paragraph about his role in The Hobbit could be expanded.
 * Done.


 * "The Lord of the Rings, begins [...]" - remove excess comma.
 * Gone.


 * The link to Lotho in the family tree redirects to "The Shire" and should be excised.
 * Gone.


 * "Throughout the 2003 video game The Hobbit the players control Bilbo," - comma should be added after "The Hobbit".
 * Added.


 * Ref 13 to Appendix C should be a primary source and not secondary.
 * Fixed.

Otherwise, an excellent article! On hold till all the above issues are fixed.  Java Hurricane  07:34, 24 May 2020 (UTC)
 * : I believe I've attended to all of them. Chiswick Chap (talk) 12:39, 27 May 2020 (UTC)