Talk:Bill Crawford-Compton/GA1

GA Review
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Nominator: 07:58, 1 June 2024 (UTC)

Reviewer: Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk · contribs) 20:33, 7 June 2024 (UTC)

I'll take a look at this one shortly. Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk) 20:33, 7 June 2024 (UTC)

Prelim

 * No relevant duplicate links
 * Images correctly licensed
 * Article is stable
 * Earwig reports copyvio unlikely

Lede and infobox

 * We seem to usually hyphenate air vice-marshal?
 * Done. Zawed (talk) 10:38, 9 July 2024 (UTC)


 * Link flight
 * Done. Zawed (talk) 10:38, 9 July 2024 (UTC)


 * Add No. 145 Wing to the infobox commands?
 * Done. Zawed (talk) 10:38, 9 July 2024 (UTC)


 * I think you're brushing over his post-war career a little too much - maybe a sentence or two more about Suez and 22 Group?
 * Done. Zawed (talk) 10:38, 9 July 2024 (UTC)


 * Could add England as place of death in infobox
 * Done. Zawed (talk) 10:38, 9 July 2024 (UTC)


 * Main text doesn't seem to mention his Legion of Honour

Early life

 * "There Crawford-Compton gained"
 * Done. Zawed (talk) 04:54, 10 July 2024 (UTC)

Second World War

 * Link groundcrew
 * Done. Zawed (talk) 05:09, 10 July 2024 (UTC)


 * Suggest mentioning the Second World War itself outside of headings at least once
 * Done (in previous section though). Zawed (talk) 05:09, 10 July 2024 (UTC)


 * Link Circus offensive
 * Done. Zawed (talk) 05:09, 10 July 2024 (UTC)


 * Link commissioned
 * Done. Zawed (talk) 05:09, 10 July 2024 (UTC)


 * "as a probable kill"
 * Went with different wording as I prefer to avoid using kill. Zawed (talk) 05:09, 10 July 2024 (UTC)


 * "he claimed another Bf 109 as a probable" do you have the date? Currently very vague!
 * Added. Zawed (talk) 05:09, 10 July 2024 (UTC)


 * The first five paragraphs all begin with dates, suggest switching this up a bit
 * Done. Zawed (talk) 05:09, 10 July 2024 (UTC)


 * Link scrambled
 * Done. Zawed (talk) 05:09, 10 July 2024 (UTC)


 * "Another Bf 109 was reported as damaged" by Crawford-Compton or the squadron?
 * "during the engagement"
 * Done. Zawed (talk) 10:14, 10 July 2024 (UTC)


 * "and this meant he missed" > "and meant he missed"
 * Done. Zawed (talk) 10:14, 10 July 2024 (UTC)


 * You seem to be avoiding mentioning his promotions?! There's no clear mention of any rank between pilot officer and group captain
 * Have added some promotions using the LG as a source. Zawed (talk) 10:02, 19 July 2024 (UTC)


 * Was No. 64 Squadron also flying Spitfires?
 * Link Clères?
 * Done. Zawed (talk) 10:14, 10 July 2024 (UTC)


 * "while flying with No. 122 Squadron was credited with damaging a Bf 109" Do we know when?
 * Done. Zawed (talk) 05:09, 10 July 2024 (UTC)


 * "operations of the RAF"
 * Done. Zawed (talk) 10:20, 10 July 2024 (UTC)


 * "Crawford-Compton was appointed wing commander"
 * Done. Zawed (talk) 10:20, 10 July 2024 (UTC)


 * "and on 9 July, Crawford-Compton destroyed"
 * Done. Zawed (talk) 10:20, 10 July 2024 (UTC)


 * Clarify command of the wing for me? Some wording in the lede and main text suggest it's his command, but he only commanded the flying part of the wing, i.e. did have an officer above him in command of the wing as a whole?
 * This touched on in the first para of the Northwest Europe section. Deere was the overall commander, and he was subsequently replaced by Malan. Zawed (talk) 10:20, 10 July 2024 (UTC)

Later life

 * "remained in his acting rank" Per one of my previous comment, I'm not sure what his rank actually was by this point!
 * As above, have added some rank info. Zawed (talk) 10:01, 19 July 2024 (UTC)


 * The Gazette has him already as acting AVM at the time of his promotion?
 * Have revised, he had been promoted to acting AVM the previous month. Zawed (talk) 10:33, 10 July 2024 (UTC)


 * What was he doing after Suez and before Cyprus?
 * A word or two on what No. 22 Group was doing/equipped with?
 * Added a little. Zawed (talk) 10:01, 19 July 2024 (UTC)