Talk:Bin Tepe/GA1

GA Review
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Nominator: 03:08, 24 March 2024 (UTC)

Reviewer: UndercoverClassicist (talk · contribs) 10:54, 1 April 2024 (UTC)

I'll take a look at this one. UndercoverClassicist T·C 10:54, 1 April 2024 (UTC)

General comments prior to full review

 * The lead is very short, and doesn't really summarise the article as it should per MOS:LEAD. As a general rule, each paragraph of the body text normally condenses down to a sentence of the lead.
 * There are a few errors in using the RP template (for instance, pp. used with only a single page, or with a hyphen instead of an endash).
 * At the start of the Site section, we should explain briefly what's at the site, so we don't have a sentence like coming before any mention of the tumuli in the body text.
 * : similarly, we need a sense of the site's chronology to make sense of this.
 * : is this explanation given in the sources? Doesn't really pass the sniff test for me (after all, if you want to hide a grave, you don't stick a whacking great tumulus on top of it!)
 * : explain and, if applicable, link crepis.
 * I would explain that Gordion was the capital of Phrygia.
 * Add the names of the excavators to the infobox. Remember that date ranges like "1854–present" take an endash.
 * : when did this happen?
 * : similarly, when was this?
 * : I don't usually see cist graves cited as an elite burial style: does the source do this?
 * : deitalicise per MOS:ITALIC. The Turkish translation should be in a language template.
 * Suggest using the convert template on the metric measurements for the benefit of users used to imperial measurements.
 * : how, exactly?
 * The two paragraphs of "major tumuli" have all their citations bundled at the end of the paragraph, which isn't great per WP:VERIFIABILITY and makes it very difficult for future editors to add or change content. Could each sentence be cited (only) to the sources that support it?
 * : who was he and when did he write?
 * It's more usual to give the Herodotus citation as "1.93". We should also credit the translator (George Rawlinson) and, possibly, give the date (1920).
 * Suggest linking Croesus in the quotation.
 * Image captions that are not full sentences should not end in a full stop/period.
 * File:Britishmuseumbintepehorserelief (cropped).jpg needs a PD tag for the original work.
 * Alt text should be added to images for accessibility.
 * All other images check out.

Thank you for these comments, ! These are really helpful, not just for this article but for my Wikipedia contributions in general. Unfortunately I don't think I can commit to implementing these changes any time soon-- I had forgotten that I nominated this article until I saw your announcement on my talk page just now. So I think I will withdraw the submission for the time being, but I will eventually implement your suggestions, which once again look very useful. Botterweg14 (talk)  16:49, 23 April 2024 (UTC)