Talk:Birthday Cake (song)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Hahc21 (talk · contribs) 04:33, 18 June 2012 (UTC)

Original interlude
— Hahc 21  14:53, 19 June 2012 (UTC)
 * Composition and lyrics
 * "1:18 (one minute, 18 seconds)" >> "one minute and 18 seconds" (spell out numbers less than 10 and avoid redundancy)
 * ✅ Aaron  &bull; You  Da  One
 * "your younger fans need more SUBSTANCE." >> a [sic] is needed after substance.
 * ✅ Aaron  &bull; You  Da  One

Remix

 * First paragraph is too long. Consider splitting.
 * The bit about Nicki, Demi, Katy etc. was actually WP:OR, I don't know who added this. But I've removed it.

General comments

 * With the actual length of the article, the lead should be longer to properly cover all the article body.
 * The first lead covers the interlude, and says Brown is on the remix. The second lead covers the remix. Aaron  &bull; You  Da  One 11:30, 20 June 2012 (UTC)

— Hahc 21  14:59, 19 June 2012 (UTC)


 * More comments
 * When you split the article, you added a cover to the remix. What happened? That cover wasn't official?
 * Can't have been. Looked it though. Aaron  &bull; You  Da  One
 * Maybe, this was the image i saw on the article: — Hahc  21  16:36, 20 June 2012 (UTC)


 * Made some fixes on 'Chart performance' of the remix:
 * "tonumber" >> "to number";
 * "Airplay Honor gainer" >> "Airplay Gainer honor again"

— Hahc 21  15:34, 20 June 2012 (UTC)
 * The 'other remixes' section is too short. Why don't you consider merging it with another one?
 * ✅ Aaron  &bull; You  Da  One
 * Also, the first paragraph of 'Development' seems to fit better on Background, since it's specs about Aguilera and tweets, mainly.
 * Hmm okay. Aaron  &bull; You  Da  One
 * Okay. Everything has bee addressed.

Verdict
— Hahc 21  16:36, 20 June 2012 (UTC)
 * Thanks Aaron  &bull; You  Da  One