Talk:Black-throated gray warbler/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Cwmhiraeth (talk · contribs) 09:53, 22 July 2014 (UTC)


 * I propose to take on this review and will go through the article in detail shortly. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 09:53, 22 July 2014 (UTC)

First reading

 * In general, this is a well-written, sensibly arranged article. A few points:


 * The synonyms are a bit mixed up and would be better arranged alphabetically.
 * Thanks for doing the review! They're chronological, that's the typical approach and the most informative approach. &mdash;innotata 16:17, 22 July 2014 (UTC)
 * Well why is Dendroica nigrescens last then? Cwmhiraeth (talk) 19:04, 22 July 2014 (UTC)
 * OK, I found the authority for this classification. &mdash;innotata 19:21, 22 July 2014 (UTC)
 * Good, they are in a logical order now. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 12:57, 24 July 2014 (UTC)


 * "The most similar birds to the black-throated gray warbler are the black-and-white and blackpoll warblers, which although black have entirely different patterns" - This is confusing because these birds are not black.
 * They're marked with black, which is what I've changed it to. &mdash;innotata 16:17, 22 July 2014 (UTC)
 * The distribution of this species is unclear. Its range extends "from southwestern British Columbia" to where?
 * To Baja, added. &mdash;innotata 16:17, 22 July 2014 (UTC)
 * The subspecies D. n. halseii "occupies the remainder of its range." At this stage you have not dealt with its range so this statement is difficult to interpret.
 * Nominate is coastal, halseii is inland, so changed it to that. &mdash;innotata 16:17, 22 July 2014 (UTC)
 * "It has spread into parts of Wyoming and Montana only recently, as Juniperus osteosperma has expanded its range due to a warming climate." - Are you stating here that the bird has expanded its range "because" the juniper has increased its range, and did the source specifically mention global warming?
 * Yes, it mentioned global warming. The juniper species is spreading, and the warbler along with it. &mdash;innotata 16:31, 22 July 2014 (UTC)
 * Reference 9 needs attention.
 * I'll let citation bot write out all those authors when it works… &mdash;innotata 16:31, 22 July 2014 (UTC)
 * Looking at reference 10, the "Rabosky & Lovette" paper, I find no mention of this species or Grace's warbler.
 * It's in Fig. 1 &mdash;innotata 16:28, 22 July 2014 (UTC)
 * " While these two species hybridize commonly, records of hybridization with the black-throated gray warbler are uncommon." - This is somewhat unclear. Which birds hybridise with which?
 * Done. &mdash;innotata 16:28, 22 July 2014 (UTC)
 * " Incubation and fledging periods are not recorded. It has been recorded giving a distraction display," - Too much repetition of the word "recorded", and the "it" should be replaced with "this bird" or somesuch as the subject of the previous sentence is a time period.
 * Done. &mdash;innotata 16:28, 22 July 2014 (UTC)
 * That's all for the moment. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 10:58, 22 July 2014 (UTC)

Further read through

 * "... young are fed by both sexes in a pair." - "fed by both parents" would be better.
 * "... bill lengths 8.4–9.6 cm (3.3–3.8 in)" - These dimensions must be wrong, perhaps it should be millimetres rather than centimetres.
 * " Among these species, it is usually considered an early offshoot, but genetic studies suggest a close relation to Grace's warbler." - How about "It is usually considered to have diverged early from other species in this group, but genetic studies suggest that it is closely related to Grace's warbler."
 * "Of these relatives, Townsend's warbler and the hermit warbler overlap with the black-throated gray warbler, but inhabit different habitats." - How about "Of these relatives, the range of the black-throated gray warbler overlaps that of Townsend's warbler and the hermit warbler, but they occur in different habitats."
 * I made a couple of copyedits, otherwise it is looking pretty good. 12:57, 24 July 2014 (UTC)
 * Yep, followed all of these fixes/suggestions. &mdash;innotata 19:45, 24 July 2014 (UTC)

Criteria
: The article complies with MOS guidelines on prose and grammar, structure and layout.
 * (a) the prose is clear and concise, it respects copyright law, and the spelling and grammar are correct
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: The article uses many reliable third-party sources, and makes frequent citations to them. I do not believe it contains original research
 * (a)
 * (b)
 * (c)

: The article covers the main aspects of the subject.
 * (a)
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. . The article's history shows that it is stable. : The images used in the article serve a relevant illustrative purpose, and are either in the public domain or properly licensed.
 * (a)
 * (b) Images are mostly relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions.

Final assessment - I believe this article now reaches the GA criteria. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 05:22, 25 July 2014 (UTC)