Talk:Black Hebrew Israelites/GA1

GA Review
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The article appears to meet most of the Good Article criteria. However, it is strongly recommended that the lead be expanded; perhaps a second paragraph could even be added to it. Gary King ( talk ) 21:16, 27 June 2008 (UTC)


 * I've expanded it a little. Do you think it's okay, or should I move some of the material from the "Overview" section into the lede? — Malik Shabazz (talk · contribs) 02:50, 28 June 2008 (UTC)


 * It looks better. A few more points:


 * "This article will " – don't self-reference the article; use other wording. Furthermore, why does the article only focus on the oldest known group?
 * I spot a [citation needed]. Please resolve it.

Gary King ( talk ) 03:04, 28 June 2008 (UTC)


 * The article focuses on four groups that are notable for different reasons: the oldest known group, the largest group, a group that is known for its adherence to traditional Jewish practice, and a group that is known for having moved to Israel (and because Whitney Houston paid them a visit). Why include the oldest? Its inclusion in the article pre-dates my involvement, but I guess it was included to highlight the practices of the earliest Black Hebrew group. Unfortunately it's also the weakest section of the article. Do you think the article would be better without it? — Malik Shabazz (talk · contribs) 03:41, 28 June 2008 (UTC)


 * I think it should stay. This article now reaches the Good Article criteria and has therefore passed. Gary King ( talk ) 03:50, 28 June 2008 (UTC)


 * Thank you. — Malik Shabazz (talk · contribs) 03:53, 28 June 2008 (UTC)