Talk:Black Parade (song)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 07:26, 29 August 2022 (UTC)

I will review this article today! --K. Peake 07:26, 29 August 2022 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

 * Why isn't electronica listed under genres in the infobox?
 * I object to the ref in the infobox; write out it was also released under Columbia in the release section instead
 * WP:OVERLINK of Beyoncé under songwriters
 * Swap the release sentence with the production one, also cut this down to being who produced the song and when it was done
 * Make the celebration part the sentence directly after the release one, adding the genres at the start of it
 * "Critics noted the track's ability" → "Critics noted the song's ability"
 * Pipe police brutality to Police brutality in the United States
 * "also acting as an" → "also serving as an"
 * "The release of the single" → "The release of the song"
 * "with four nominations including" → "with four nominations, including"
 * Mention the commercial performance at the end of the lead

Background and production

 * Any article to link 2020 Black Lives Matter Protests to?
 * Wikilink Kentucky Attorney General
 * Pipe Daniel Cameron to Daniel Cameron (American politician)
 * Pipe Breonna Taylor to Killing of Breonna Taylor
 * The sleeping part is not sourced
 * "urged Cameron to "take" → "urged Cameron, "Take"
 * "in charging the officers"." → "in charging the officers."" per MOS:QUOTE on full sentences
 * Img looks good!
 * Associated Press should not be italicised
 * Wikilink Derek Dixie, however this quote is not sourced
 * Quote box looks good!
 * Merge the third para with the second one per the overly short size
 * "on July 31 in order to capitalize off of it," → "on July 31, 2020. The simultaneous release could have been capitalize off of,"

Release

 * Retitle to Release and promotion
 * Make this the section directly after comp
 * The first sentence also needs a citation to back up the release date of the song
 * The celebrating part from Beyoncé's quote is unsourced
 * Merge the third para with the second one per this also being promo

Composition

 * Retitle to Composition and lyrics
 * Img looks good!
 * Consequence of Sound → Consequence, piping to Consequence (publication)
 * "brass bands [and]" → "brass bands, [and]"
 * "police brutality and the" → "police brutality, and the" but why are the protests linked here instead of earlier?
 * "her Texan roots as well as" → "her Texan roots, as well as"
 * Where is the Oshun part after Orishas sourced?
 * It is not sourced that Beyoncé sings these lyrics during the second verse
 * "Martin Luther King Jr. and her mother" → "Martin Luther King Jr., and her mother"
 * "noted that she pointed out the" → "noted that the singer points out the"

Critical reception

 * "saying that "Black Parade" is" → "saying that 'Black Parade' is"
 * "family and past" and describing Beyoncé" → "family and past", and describing Beyoncé"
 * NPR should not be italicised
 * "of the George Floyd protests" → "of the Floyd protests"
 * "nation" as well as" → "nation", as well as"
 * "Afrodiasporic and African culture and history in the song, such as the George Floyd protests," → "Afrodiasporic, and African culture and history in the song, such as the Floyd protests,"
 * "in a full moon and the" → "in a full moon, and the"
 * "blackity, black, black" → "Blackity, Black, Black" per the source
 * Only use the surname Corcoran per an introduction already having been provided
 * BBC News should not be italicised
 * Only use the surname Wood per an intro already having been provided
 * "lyric in the song references" → "lyrics in the song reference"
 * "to Africa and grows despite" → "to Africa, growing despite" to avoid overusage of and
 * "lyric describes turning a" → "lyrics describe turning a"
 * Remove or replace the Forbes review per WP:FORBES
 * "describing how there is" → "Wood described how there is" as a new sentence, moving to the start of the below para instead
 * "however, he continues:" → "however, he continued:"
 * Pipe Complex to Complex (magazine) per MOS:LINK2SECT
 * ""We got rhythm, we got pride," at" → "'We got rhythm, we got pride,' at"
 * "party, as well"." → "party, as well."" per MOS:QUOTE on full sentences
 * "noting that Beyoncé" → "noting that she"

Year-end lists

 * Remove or replace PopSugar since that is a gossip website
 * Either mention the name of the iHeartRadio author or write "with the staff describing..."
 * Be less repetitive rather than using named for every instance
 * "Consequence of Sound named the single the" → "Consequence named the single the"
 * "the 19th best song of 2020" → "the 19th best song of the year"
 * Either mention the name of the Stereogum reviewer or use the staff indentification
 * "lifetimes, "Parade" dually uplifted" → "lifetimes, 'Parade' dually uplifted"
 * HipHopDx → HipHopDX

Commercial performance

 * "debuted on the U.S." → "debuted on the US"
 * "top 40 hit" → "top-40 hit"
 * "matching Michael Jackson." → "matching Michael Jackson's record."
 * "on the Digital Song Sales" → "on the US Digital Song Sales"
 * Shouldn't number-one in the context of an achievement always have a dash for consistency?
 * Mention the release year of "Single Ladies (Put a Ring on It)"
 * Use refnames to add the citations from the chart table for these positions

Awards and nominations

 * ""Black Parade" won" → "The song won"
 * Pipe Grammy to Grammy Awards
 * "and now ties Frank Sinatra for the most nominated artist in this category in" → "and tied Frank Sinatra for the most in this category in" to be less wordy
 * Surround "after Pharrell Williams" with commas instead of brackets
 * Pipe "Savage Remix" to Savage (Remix) per MOS:LINK2SECT
 * "Beyoncé also became the" → "The singer also became the"
 * The Best R&B Song part is not sourced in prose
 * "making Beyoncé the most" → "making her the most"

Personnel

 * Retitle to Credits and personnel
 * Use so there is the right space between credits and personnel
 * Pipe Brittany Coney and Denisia Andrews to Nova Wav, also why is there @ in their names here?

Charts

 * Good

Certifications

 * See MOS:TABLECAPTION

Release history

 * Format → Format(s)
 * The release is not backed up as various for the first one

Final comments and verdict

 * until all of the issues are fixed! --K. Peake 12:04, 29 August 2022 (UTC)
 * I'd like to request that this nomination be failed, so I can work on these suggestions on my own pace. — VersaceSpace  🌃 02:01, 4 September 2022 (UTC)
 * How long will it take, as I can keep on hold a week or so longer if need be? --K. Peake 06:42, 4 September 2022 (UTC)
 * I'm not sure, but I have no motivation to complete it within the week or month really. — VersaceSpace  🌃 04:23, 8 September 2022 (UTC)
 * ❌ time per the user request. --K. Peake 20:14, 8 September 2022 (UTC)