Talk:Blood Harmony/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 08:30, 26 January 2021 (UTC)

Oldest album GAN right now; appropriate for me to review now since I removed this nom originally when you had retired! --K. Peake 08:30, 26 January 2021 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

 * Infobox looks good!
 * "by his own label OYOY, through AWAL," → "by his record label OYOY, distributed by AWAL," with the wikilink
 * Release date is not mentioned anywhere in the body; probably write out in the third section
 * "record. The EP was a commercial underperformance," → "record that commercial underperformed," to avoid having such a short sentence
 * "The EP's lead single," → "The lead single," with the wikilink
 * "and Rock Airplay charts." → "and Rock Airplay charts, respectively."
 * "support of the release." → "support of the EP."
 * "on August 7, 2020 featuring" → "on August 7, 2020, featuring"
 * Target single to Single (music)
 * ❌, already wikilinked in the first sentence of the second para. The Ultimate Boss (talk) 05:19, 27 January 2021 (UTC)
 * My bad, must have missed that. --K. Peake 06:08, 27 January 2021 (UTC)


 * Remove comma before entitled

Background

 * "Finneas teased the EP" → "Finneas teased Blood Harmony"
 * "The EP marks" → "The EP marked"
 * "speaks for itself."" → "speaks for itself"." per MOS:QUOTE
 * "He also said" → "Finneas also said,"
 * I take issue with the second sentence of the quote, as that is practically all repeating what was said before so remove it but keep the first sentence.

Composition

 * Retitle to Composition and lyrics
 * Target ballad to Sentimental ballad
 * "It features minimalist" → "The song features minimalist production"
 * "an aggressive beat and" → "an aggressive beat, and"
 * [8][6] should be put in numerical order
 * Add comma after "Shelter"
 * Add mention of the song's tropical beat
 * ❌ --K. Peake 06:08, 27 January 2021 (UTC)


 * Target Latin to Latin music
 * Target gospel to Gospel music
 * Wikilink bluesy
 * "vocal embellishment and" → "vocal embellishment, and"
 * "with elements of" → "has elements of"
 * ❌ for some reason this has been removed --K. Peake 06:08, 27 January 2021 (UTC)
 * I removed it because of The Heights sources mentioned it had elements of pop. The Ultimate Boss (talk) 06:55, 27 January 2021 (UTC)


 * "sees Finneas sing" → "It sees Finneas sing"
 * "and gets angry when the past gets" → "while getting angry when the past seemingly blends"
 * "and finds comfort by dreaming that they can be together in" → "but finds comfort by dreaming about being together with her in"
 * Remove target on ballad
 * "and are almost entirely" → "with it being almost entirely"
 * Change entitled to titled to be less repetitive with the lead
 * "has noted the influence of" → "noted the influence of"
 * [28][5] put in numerical order

Promotion

 * Retitle to Release and promotion; remove the sub-section for singles and add the album's release as the first sentence
 * The source only backs up the song's release in Australia; either add more citations, a different one or reword accordingly
 * You forgot to add Canada after "in"
 * Wikilink music video
 * "directed by Sam Bennett and choreographed" → "directed by Sam Bennett, while choreographed"
 * Target single to Single (music)
 * Same issue with the second single as the one I mentioned earlier in this section
 * "It received a remix" → "The song received a remix"
 * Add a comma after "Shelter"
 * "on September 30, 2019." → "and released on September 30, 2019."
 * ❌, already mentions that it is the four and final single. The Ultimate Boss (talk) 05:19, 27 January 2021 (UTC)
 * Damn, my bad here again. --K. Peake 06:08, 27 January 2021 (UTC)

Live performances

 * "Finneas toured throughout the" → "He toured throughout the"
 * "In October of the same year," → "That same month,"
 * Remove the word setlist since there is no setlist mentioned, just the tracks on the album
 * Add speech mark to end the title "I Don't Miss You at All"

Reception

 * Remove the opening sentence, as three reviews is not enough to back a critical overview up
 * "writing for NME gave the EP 4 out of 5 stars, saying the songs" → "writing for NME, said the songs" since the rating is in the box
 * "and has an" → "and have an"


 * "modern production tweaks."" → "modern production tweaks"." per MOS:QUOTE
 * "Writing for Billboard, Glenn Rowley" → "For Billboard, Glenn Rowley"
 * "of human emotion."" → "of human emotion"."


 * "was the "most" → "is the "most"
 * "of Finneas' career."" → "of Finneas' career"."
 * "She continued saying" → "She continued, saying"
 * "and production triumph."" → "and production triumph"."

Track listing

 * Good

Charts

 * See MOS:TABLECAPTION

Final comments and verdict

 * until all of the issues are fixed, but make sure you go through properly to avoid missing things like you did the last few times! --K. Peake 12:03, 26 January 2021 (UTC)
 * Kyle Peake Thanks for the review. All of your concerns should be completed. The Ultimate Boss (talk) 05:29, 27 January 2021 (UTC)
 * You missed a few, which I went over above. --K. Peake 06:08, 27 January 2021 (UTC)
 * Kyle Peake Jesus Christ. I'm so stupid. I have fixed them now... The Ultimate Boss (talk) 06:56, 27 January 2021 (UTC)
 * ✅ now, and advice for next time would be to go through the comments more than once to check everything is done. --K. Peake 07:23, 27 January 2021 (UTC)