Talk:Blue Murder (album)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Wetrorave (talk · contribs) 04:54, 2 July 2021 (UTC)

I'll review this article's later half first. Yes, later; is it ok to review an album article from bottom to top? The order here will not be reversed; I'm just finding it more effective to review lists before prose, since prose is generally harder to work on

More will follow – or should I say, more will be before... Wetrorave (talk) 04:54, 2 July 2021 (UTC)

Infobox and lead
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 * I would suggest converting the citations in the Genre parameter to the prose. Add this to the source code in the beginning of the section Music and lyrics:
 * With this, the genres will be properly sourced as Template:Infobox album requires
 * "band Blue Murder. Released on 24 April 1989 by Geffen Records, it was produced by Bob Rock." > "band Blue Murder, released on 24 April 1989 by Geffen Records. It was produced by Bob Rock."
 * "The band was formed by guitarist John Sykes after his dismissal from Whitesnake. He recruited drummer Cozy Powell, bassist Tony Franklin and vocalist Ray Gillen in early 1987. After recording some demos, Gillen and Powell left, only to be replaced by Tony Martin and Carmine Appice, respectively. However, Martin soon left as well and the rest of the band entered Little Mountain Sound Studios in early 1988 to record their debut album." – is all of this really necessary in the lead? The lead should serve as "an introduction to the article and a summary of its most important contents." I don't think the whole story of the band is necessary in the lead, especially since this is a debut album; try leaving only the info that directly impacted the album
 * I would suggest changing it to this: "As a search for a new lead singer proved unsuccessful, guitarist John Sykes eventually took up the role, having already sung the band's first demos."
 * "from critics," > "from music critics,"

Background
Looks mostly good!
 * "group's self-titled album, which" > "group's eponymous album, which" – 'eponymous' is the word most used in other Good/Featured articles

Production and composition
Also looks good

Music and lyrics

 * "described Blue Murder's sound" – in the case Blue Murder is referring to the album, it should be italicized
 * "have also been compared to" > "have also drawn comparisons to" – "drawn comparisons" is generally easier to read than "have also been compared to", given that it is active rather than passive

Release and promotion

 * "They then embraked" – embraked?
 * "a new interview with John Sykes." > "an interview with John Sykes." – 'new' is a subjective and vague word
 * "as a part of the track listing." > "as part of the content." – this is in order to avoid repetition of the word "list", which has already been mentioned at "pressings listed a tenth song,"

Singles
Looks good

Critical reception

 * Remove the 'positive' and 'negative' ratings from Guitar World and Spin, which constitute original research according to the Album ratings template
 * "Raw's Paul Suter" > "Raw's Paul Suter" – use Template:' here
 * "Rock Hard's review" – also use ' here
 * "Spin's Jon Young" – '
 * Italicize Ultimate Classic Rock

This finishes the review. Click here now. Wetrorave (talk) 15:47, 2 July 2021 (UTC)

Track listing
Looks good

Personnel

 * Wikilink the first instance of the word (a) engineer to audio engineer, (b) mixing to audio mixing (recorded music), (c) mastering to mastering (audio), and (d) remastering to remaster

Charts

 * The refs should be alongside the Peak positions, not the Charts

Conclusion

 * until the raised problems are fixed; I really hope my method of reviewing wasn't confusing Wetrorave (talk) 15:47, 2 July 2021 (UTC)