Talk:Bluebird (Buffalo Springfield song)/GA1

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Reviewer: MarioSoulTruthFan (talk · contribs) 14:17, 4 April 2020 (UTC)

Thanks for reviewing this. —Ojorojo (talk) 18:20, 5 April 2020 (UTC)

Infobox

 * 45 rpm record → 7-inch (few people know the rpm, but they are familia with the 7-inch format)
 * I doubt many people who bought or played these when they were popular knew or thought of them as "7-inch". 45 rpm was usually printed on the record label, so the correct speed could be selected on the turntable (the choices being 33, 45, and 78 – "7-inch" etc. was not used). However, added clarification. —Ojorojo (talk) 18:20, 5 April 2020 (UTC)


 * country rock → no source given and it should be on the body of the article, as well
 * Removed, covered by folk-rock. —Ojorojo (talk) 18:20, 5 April 2020 (UTC)

Lead

 * in April 1967 → in April 1967 by Atco Records
 * Added more helpful release date instead. —Ojorojo (talk) 18:20, 5 April 2020 (UTC)


 * Written by Stephen Stills → Written by Stephen Stills and produced by the latter along with co-production by Ahmet Ertegun
 * Reworded. —Ojorojo (talk) 18:20, 5 April 2020 (UTC)


 * It was released as a follow-up to their hit "For What It's Worth", despite not being as commercially successful
 * For clarification, added the actual position instead (as below). —Ojorojo (talk) 18:20, 5 April 2020 (UTC)


 * Add the meaning of the song's lyrics, menton it peaked at number seven on the Billboard Hot 100 and critics thoughs on the track
 * Done (as above, although peaked at #58). —Ojorojo (talk) 18:20, 5 April 2020 (UTC)

Background

 * "For What It's Worth" → add release date in between brackets
 * Added to following sentence which mentions "release". —Ojorojo (talk) 18:20, 5 April 2020 (UTC)


 * "Bluebird" became Buffalo Springfield's fourth single, backed with "Mr.Soul" → "Bluebird" became Buffalo Springfield's fourth single, with "Mr.Soul" as a B-Side.
 * Changed. —Ojorojo (talk) 18:20, 5 April 2020 (UTC)


 * It also appears on several Buffalo Springfield anthologies, including → very bias "It also appears on several Buffalo Springfield albums, including
 * [I think this applies to the "Releases" section] Unsure what you mean by "very bias": "anthology" simply means a collection (i.e. Retrospective, Box set, etc.) to distinguish them from "studio" albums. However, removed designations altogether. —Ojorojo (talk) 18:20, 5 April 2020 (UTC)


 * although he...Young left the group soon after → although the latter...he left the group soon after
 * Done. —Ojorojo (talk) 18:20, 5 April 2020 (UTC)


 * anthology → bias
 * See above. —Ojorojo (talk) 18:20, 5 April 2020 (UTC)

Composition and recording

 * April 4, 1967, is the only session date that has been identified, although the song required multiple overdubs → According to various sources, "Bluebird" only took one session date to record, April 4, 1967, although the song required multiple overdubs
 * This would change the meaning, since the sources don't say that it was completed on this date. —Ojorojo (talk) 18:20, 5 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Try this instead, "There was only one session date that has been identified, April 4, 1967, although the song required multiple overdubs. The sentence shouldn't begun with the date, unless is "On April 5, 2020". MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 20:12, 5 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Nice, used yours. —Ojorojo (talk) 13:30, 6 April 2020 (UTC)

Releases and charts

 * Initially, it performed well on area radio, where the song reached number two on KHJ (AM) → Initially, it performed well on area radio, reaching number two on KHJ (AM)
 * Done. —Ojorojo (talk) 18:20, 5 April 2020 (UTC)


 * national → US
 * Done. —Ojorojo (talk) 18:20, 5 April 2020 (UTC)


 * the Buffalo Springfield box set (2001), and What's That Sound? Complete Albums Collection (2018). → sources
 * Added. —Ojorojo (talk) 18:20, 5 April 2020 (UTC)

Critical reception

 * folk-rock → wikilink
 * Linked earlier occurrence in "Composition" section: "creating a radio-friendly folk-rock tune". —Ojorojo (talk) 18:20, 5 April 2020 (UTC)

Live performances

 * who were also on the bill → remove
 * Done. —Ojorojo (talk) 18:20, 5 April 2020 (UTC)

Other versions

 * Old Ways → add release date in between brackets
 * Added. —Ojorojo (talk) 18:20, 5 April 2020 (UTC)

Overall

 * You can now address the issues I raised. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 17:13, 4 April 2020 (UTC)
 * I've covered your points; let me know if further clarification is needed. —Ojorojo (talk) 18:20, 5 April 2020 (UTC)
 * I left you a note on "Composition and recording" and "References". That's it. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 20:15, 5 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Fixed/explained. Thanks again for your review. —Ojorojo (talk) 13:30, 6 April 2020 (UTC)


 * Shouldn't you have a personnel section?
 * All the participants and their instruments are identified in prose, so a separate section is unneeded. Also, see MOS:OVERSECTION: "Very short or very long sections and subsections in an article look cluttered and inhibit the flow of the prose. Short paragraphs and single sentences generally do not warrant their own subheading." —Ojorojo (talk) 13:30, 6 April 2020 (UTC)