Talk:Bob Noel/GA1

GA Review
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Nominator: 22:49, 24 April 2024 (UTC)

Reviewer: Gonzo fan2007 (talk · contribs) 22:54, 24 April 2024 (UTC)

I'll review this tomorrow. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 22:54, 24 April 2024 (UTC)

Comments
Looks good, putting on hold. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 23:30, 25 April 2024 (UTC)
 * I'm wondering if American football is necessary in the first sentence. Maybe American equipment manager? Would get ride of the consecutive linking and add in his ethnicity.
 * Noel attended Central Catholic High School in Wisconsin and while attending there enlisted in World War II at the age of 18. is a bit choppy. Maybe Noel attended Central Catholic High School in Wisconsin; while still in high school, he enlisted in World War II at the age of 18.?
 * and a "lot of smaller things" needed by the team for each game --> and a "lot of smaller things" needed for each game
 * as well as 30 balls for games --> as well as 30 game balls
 * 11 head coaches you could link to List of Green Bay Packers head coaches
 * I don't know what in the hell I could've done more."[8] and He served the team faithfully and well for a long time."[13] I think the period needs to go after the quotation mark
 * For the image, you need to do a few things: change the link to be the non-Wikimedia Library link. Also, the copyright holder is the Green Bay Press-Gazette (the image caption notes "Press-Gazette Files". Lastly, add a caption to the infobox, something like "Noel working on a helmet in an undated photo". Also, the image needs to be downsized, which the bot will do at some point.
 * Spot checks look good. Ref 6, 11 and 14 needs an access date (I typically do them for all citations, but I think you don't; I think thats ok for the Newspaper.com sources, but the others are just live web pages, and thus need access dates).
 * I believe I've addressed all your points. Thanks, BeanieFan11 (talk) 18:02, 26 April 2024 (UTC)
 * Nice work, passed! « Gonzo fan2007 (talk)  @ 19:29, 26 April 2024 (UTC)