Talk:Bob Quinn (Australian footballer)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 19:31, 21 April 2018 (UTC)

Going to have a look and comments will appear soon. MWright96 (talk) 19:31, 21 April 2018 (UTC)
 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
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General

 * There are several referring to Quinn as "Bob Quinn" which are not necessary and will need addressing
 * Also, be consistent in how Port Adelaide is refered to; it must not be refered to as simply "Port"

Lead

 * On a quick glance, the lead is lacking detail. It could do with some mentioning of Quinn's major achievements throughout his career, his wartime service, and what he did in his post-football career

1933: Debut for Port Adelaide

 * "On the 6 May 1933, Bob Quinn made his debut for Port Adelaide in Round 2 match of the 1933 SANFL season in a draw against Norwood at Alberton Oval." - reword this sentence to On 6 May 1933, Quinn made his debut for Port Adelaide in a 1933 SANFL season Round 2 match against Norwood at Alberton Oval.
 * "he kicked one goal and was named in Port Adelaide's best." - best player?
 * "Playing as a rover, Quinn quickly gained a reputation as one of the leading players in South Australia." - this sentence is not referenced
 * Wikilink rover to Follower (Australian rules football)

1934: Quinn vs Colyer

 * "despite a 131-point win over Glenelg Football Club," - try victory to get more wording variety into the article
 * "In the first semi final," - semi final should be hyphenated

1935: Port finish runner up again

 * "During the 1935 SANFL season Port Adelaide would win the minor premiership but falter in the Grand Final to South Adelaide by 8 points." - this sentence is lacking a reliable citation
 * Link 1935 SANFL season
 * Wikilink Grand Final to 1935 SANFL Grand Final and South Adelaide to South Adelaide Football Club, respectively

1936: Quinn pulls Port over the line

 * "and the clubs first since 1928." - link 1928 to 1928 SANFL Grand Final and clubs should be spelt as club's

1937: Back to back and Magarey runner-up

 * "Generally, the voting Magarey Medal voting is conducted under a 3–2–1 vote system but under a trial," - should be worded as Generally, the voting for the Magarey Medal is conducted under a 3–2–1 vote system but under a trial,
 * "polling 36 voyes to Hawke's 37." - votes

1938: First Magarey and Victorian approaches

 * "In 1938 Quinn was awarded the Magarey Medal" - delink Magarey Medal since its already linked in the previous sub-section
 * Geelong will need linking to Geelong Football Club

1939: Captain-coach of Port Adelaide

 * Bob Maclean needs to be wikilink to the Bob McLean (Australian footballer) article

Return to football (1944–1947)

 * "Despite serious injuries to his arm, leg, and face Quinn returned to Australia and resumed his footballing career despite early prognosis suggesting he would never play again." - this sentence has no reliable reference

1944: Last year at Port/Torrens

 * "His return match was the first round of the 1944 season," - link 1944 season to 1944 SANFL season

1945: Quinn & Bunton

 * "The 1945 SANFL season returned to an eight club competition with all clubs competing in their own right." - wikilink 1945 SANFL season and replace the second clubs with the word teams
 * "Quinn started the season with an arm sound sustained in World War II" - Second World War
 * "Quinn and Bunton regularly combined during the season to show off their superior" - display
 * "three wins clear of clear of second place West Torrens," - should be three wins clear of second place West Torrens,
 * "and were firm favorites for the Grand Final," - Grand Final needs to be linked to 1945 SANFL Grand Final
 * "After leading early, Port were overtaken by a faster finishing West Torrens who defeated Port Adelaide 15.25 (115) to 15.12 (102)." - This sentence should be written as After leading early, Port Adelaide were overtaken by a faster=finishing West Torrens who won 15.25 (115) to 15.12 (102).

1946: Draw in Victoria

 * "he doctor told Bob that he saw his name" - Quinn

1947: Sporting Life's All-Australian captain and retirement

 * The entire paragraph in the sub-section is not cited to a reliable source(s)
 * "Sporting Life magazine named Bob Quinn as the captain in the first concept of an All-Australian team with only three South Australian's selected in the side." - Sporting Life needs to be italised since it is a print magazine and wikilink All-Australian

Post-football

 * "deciding instead to move to Kadina in South Australia's Yorke Peninsula to become the proprieter" - proprietor
 * "Later in life, Quinn returned to Adelaide and bought the Southwark Hotel, serving as publican there for many years." - sentence is not referenced

Sporting Family

 * The first paragraph of this sub-section is enterily lacking reliable citation(s)

Reputation

 * To avoid having one-sentence paragraphs here, you will need to merge paragraphs four and five with each other.
 * The same needs to be undertaken to the sixth and seventh paragraphs
 * Wikilink Tim Ginever