Talk:Bobby Richardson/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Larry Hockett (talk · contribs) 19:21, 23 May 2020 (UTC)

I'll be happy to take on this review. I will leave some section-by-section comments in the next few days. Thanks to the nominator for the work on this entry. Larry Hockett (Talk) 19:21, 23 May 2020 (UTC)

Lead
 * "though it was not until 1959 that he would become a regular at second base" - Can we reword this to clarify whether he was playing another position or just not a regular? It seems unusual for someone to become an All-Star before becoming a regular.


 * "catching McCovey's line drive in what The Sporting News called baseball's 13th most memorable play" - For context, the year they produced this list might be helpful; it doesn't appear to be specified in the body or in the SABR biography, but there's a book on Amazon by this title that was published in 1999.

Early life
 * "11 out of 16 Major League Baseball (MLB) teams" - Consider rewording this sentence per MOS:NUMNOTES while still respecting the bit about comparable values. Maybe "Richardson received interest from 11 of the 16..."


 * Consider linking Bill Harris - I assume this is Bill Harris (1930s pitcher).

1953-1956
 * 171 hits - seems out of place; the rest of the 1954 stats are placed inside parentheses ("hits (171, first)").

I'll come back and finish the rest of the sections soon, but this looks like a well-written and well-referenced entry that shouldn't have any problem being promoted. Larry Hockett (Talk) 22:45, 25 May 2020 (UTC)
 * Made all changes suggested so far! Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 16:19, 26 May 2020 (UTC)

1957-59
 * The opening sentence of this section seems overly long. Consider splitting into two sentences.


 * "great stops and catches...no one gets rid of the ball" - Per MOS:ELLIPSIS, place an nbsp before the ellipsis and a regular space after the ellipsis.


 * "the first time as this year, the Yankees defeated the Braves..." - comma after time and not year

1960-62
 * Reference spot check: The involvement of Sport magazine in the Corvette seems to be supported by the SABR bio, not by The Times and Democrat reference. (T&D mentions the Corvette but not Sport.)
 * T&D mentions he got the car, but SABR clarifies who it is from, so I changed it so that both references are cited for the sentence. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 02:48, 27 May 2020 (UTC)


 * "The Society for American Baseball Research called 1962 his most productive year" - I wouldn't phrase it this way; SABR BioProject bios are the work of individual volunteer SABR members with a few others involved in the editorial process, so the statements in a bio don't really represent an official stance of the organization.

1963-66
 * In the second sentence, I don't think you need "During the season".


 * last paragraph - "1965 campaign" - It's hard to write an encyclopedia article without some jargon, but I think "season" is much better here for the more casual reader, especially since he did enter politics a decade later.


 * "he addressed the fans" - addressed usually means "spoke to", not "said to".
 * Yes, and he did speak to them - this wasn't just a newspaper ad. Addressed is used correctly here. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 02:50, 27 May 2020 (UTC)

1976 political campaign
 * succeeded in convincing Richardson --> convinced Richardson

Personal life
 * "Today, he is a speaker" - Avoid today per WP:RELTIME.

References
 * There is some inconsistency in the use of lowercase/uppercase for periodical article titles in the reference list. Most are written in title case, but some are sentence case (like ref #78, NY Daily News article).
 * The inconsistency is in the articles themselves. I formatted the titles however the article itself did. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 02:52, 27 May 2020 (UTC)

I think that's all I have. I appreciate your hard work on this well-written entry! Larry Hockett (Talk) 00:31, 27 May 2020 (UTC)
 * GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):  d (copyvio and plagiarism):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
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