Talk:Body Talk Pt. 2/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Novice7 (talk) 16:59, 17 April 2011 (UTC)

I'll be reviewing this article. Novice7 (talk) 16:59, 17 April 2011 (UTC)

Very good work Pancake! Here are a few comments:


 * DAB/EL Check:
 * No DAB
 * A dead link and a few redirects:


 * Media:
 * The source for album art can be formatted to look better. Add something like: "Obtained from Konichiwa Records Official Website"
 * File:Robyn_Hang_with_Me.OGG needs an extra fair use rationale for Body Talk Pt. 2.

Lead

 * Robyn started working on songs for the album [..] still in the works – though they're not connected her, "working" and "work" are redundant. Please change it.
 * classic single – I suppose it's Single (music). If so, link it.
 * In the United States, it peaked at number forty-one, becoming Robyn's highest position on the chart. The album charted moderately elsewhere, reaching number one in Denmark and number three in Norway. – number one is not a moderate success. Also, arrange the chart performance according to the chart success. Sweden -> Denmark -> Norway and then US.
 * Can you include the year Body Talk Pt. 1 was released in brackets?

Background
*Since Robyn is from Sweden, add "US music weekly" before Billboard.
 * Year after Robyn.
 * Shouldn't it be something like "music magazine"? I don't understand "US music weekly Billboard" :P Pancake (talk) 17:29, 24 April 2011 (UTC)
 * Yes, oops! I'm kinda sleepy, lol. Music magazine/journal it is :) Novice7 (talk) 17:32, 24 April 2011 (UTC)
 * lol:) the work is done. Pancake (talk) 17:33, 24 April 2011 (UTC)


 * sing vocals on a remix of his single "Sexual Eruption." – year after "Sexual Eruption" and the period should go outside the quote.

Composition

 * Mention the name of the author before The Guardian's analysis.
 * Link synth
 * The first and only single, "Hang with Me", carries – remove the "first and only single" part. it is mentioned below (in Singles section).
 * "was described" repeats... (The fourth track, "Love Kills" was described as [...] "We Dance to the Beat" was described as..'')
 * If possible, can you reduce the quoted material by converting them to reported speech?

Critical reception

 * Indicate the Metacritic score summary (Generally favorable reviews)
 * Body Talk Pt. 2 is a perfectly solid-- and occasionally awesome-- – fix the "--" to "—"
 * Heather Phares of Allmusic wrote that Robyn proves with the album – Try Heather Phares of Allmusic wrote that through the album, Robyn proves that...

Commercial performance

 * For the Billboard chart, can you provide the debut date/week?
 * Year after Robyn Is Here
 * I can see that there are few more charted regions. Maybe add them to this section?
 * I added "The album also reached the top fifty in Belgium (Flanders), Ireland, Finland, Germany and Austria". I don't think there's anything else to say :) Pancake (talk) 17:29, 24 April 2011 (UTC)
 * That's much better :) Novice7 (talk) 17:32, 24 April 2011 (UTC)

Singles

 * I feel the thing about "Hang with Me" being recorded by Bruna and Robyn's comment on the song will fit better on "Background" section.

Charts

 * Properly sourced and arranged. The only thing is that the Succession boxes should be moved and placed below the Metacritic external link (per WP:FOOTER)