Talk:Bolivia Carmichaels/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Mike Christie (talk · contribs) 12:50, 22 August 2022 (UTC)

I'll review this. Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 12:50, 22 August 2022 (UTC)

Images are appropriately tagged; sources are reliable. -- Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 12:58, 22 August 2022 (UTC)
 * The only issue with the article is that there are rather a lot of direct quotes for such a short article. There are seven quotes, with a total length of about one third of the article.  I think at least half of this should be paraphrased.


 * @Mike Christie Thanks for reviewing. I've removed 3 of the quotes, which leaves the following:
 * Superstar Diva MegaShow described as "self-expressive takes on ginger-haired comediennes, Hollywood starlets and Disney villains, among other icons"
 * Jankowski's description of Darcelle XV Showplace as "the go-to place for the most traditional style of drag: heavy makeup, classic gowns, and groan-worthy jokes from some of Portland's finest queens"
 * Crown Prince Roc Award is presented "to an individual after years of service, that keeps our organization larger than life, not only a presence but a mover and a shaker in the community through performance and activism"
 * Drew York's quote, "A longtime queen with a history of community outreach, Bolivia Carmichaels gave a multi-faceted performance, dressed in a velvety purple gown and lip-synching a duet to 'A Whole New World' with a puppet. Carmichaels allowed her hobby of puppeteering to take center stage, and it certainly had humorous moments."
 * Do you think further paraphrasing is needed, or are these 4 quotes reasonable? --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 14:43, 22 August 2022 (UTC)
 * I think a bit more cutting is needed. Sorry -- I know some of them are colourful, but the article is so short that there's just too much quoted wordage percentage-wise. Mike Christie (talk - contribs -  library) 14:46, 22 August 2022 (UTC)
 * @Mike Christie No problem. I've done some more trimming. I believe there are now only 2 quotes longer than a few words. Does this work for you? --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 14:59, 22 August 2022 (UTC)
 * That does it; thanks. Passing. Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 15:00, 22 August 2022 (UTC)
 * Thank you! --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 15:06, 22 August 2022 (UTC)