Talk:BonBon/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 06:22, 13 April 2022 (UTC)

This looks like a larger article than most of yours, will start a review shortly! --K. Peake 06:22, 13 April 2022 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

 * Dancehall should not be capitalised, also why are the genres ordered differently in the infobox from elsewhere?
 * Remove the musically part from the fourth sentence, starting with "A dance-pop..." followed by the other genres
 * "with its Albanian-language lyrics implying an" → "its Albanian-language lyrics imply an"
 * "as well as Istrefi's appearance and vocal delivery, being linkened to" → "Some praised Istrefi's vocal delivery, linkening it to" as a new sentence
 * "and reaching the top 20 in multiple countries." → "and reaching the top 10 in four other countries." per top 20 not being mentioned anywhere in the body
 * "It became Istrefi's breakthrough" → "The song became Istrefi's breakthrough"
 * ""BonBon" was awarded" → "It was awarded" removing the high sales part that is implied
 * "including platinum in" → "alongside a platinum certification in" and mention the French certification organization
 * Remove the word official from the YouTube channel part, as that is implied
 * Remove her dress style per lack of notability for the lead

Background and composition

 * The Balkans is not directly mentioned by the source
 * The song being her first ever to chart in Albania is not mentioned by the source, so either add a chart history or remove this part
 * "made its international breakthrough" → "made her international breakthrough"
 * "with the production by" → "with the production handled by"
 * Pipe mastered to Mastering (audio)
 * Pipe mixed to Audio mixing (recorded music)
 * [8] should be solely at the end of the sentence before [9]
 * Where are some of the lyrics being in English specifically sourced? If not, add the Billboard ref here.
 * "and sings about self-love and that she do not" → "singing about self-love and how she does not"

Reception and accolades

 * Retitle to Reception since there is only two accolades
 * "was met with generally positive reviews" → "was met with widespread acclaim"
 * "appearance and vocal delivery, and constantly compared them" → "vocal delivery, constantly comparing it" since she is the lead artist
 * [7][11][12][13][14] is too many refs at the end of one sentence per WP:OVERCITE; move some around the sentence to appropriate points
 * Give context showing that the link to Major Lazer was praise
 * What makes Think In Electronic reliable; I cannot see evidence of even any editorial process?
 * If the above source is kept, remove South African website introduction and write "The staff of" before it
 * Reference is now [53] Iaof2017 (talk) 16:17, 13 April 2022 (UTC)


 * Remove German radio station introduction to BigFM and do not italicise it
 * Wikilink as reggae instead
 * "were destined for" → "was destined for" but the evening quote is not sourced
 * It's mentioned in the end "sind aber auch prädestiniert für einen gemütlichen Chill-Abend" Iaof2017 (talk) 16:20, 13 April 2022 (UTC)


 * "Fans of "BonBon" include" → "Fans of "BonBon" included" and start a new para at this point, as the info is separate from reviews
 * Pipe to Top Music Awards 2016 should be on 2016 Top Music Awards
 * Remove wikilink on Tirana per WP:OVERLINK on obvious ones

Commercial performance

 * The Greece, Romania and Sweden charts should come after all of the others since they are secondary ones
 * "were achieved in countries including the" → "were achieved in the" because these are all of the remaining top 10 positions
 * The source for Slovakia is not loading
 * "Switzerland,[42] and Ukraine." → "Switzerland[42] and Ukraine."
 * "was awarded gold in" → "was awarded gold certifications in"
 * "also received platinum" → "also received a platinum" and mention when this one was, as it's the most notable certification

Music video

 * Img looks good!
 * "After being signed to the label," → "After she was signed to the label,"
 * Remove word official from the second sentence because that is implied after the previous one
 * The clip being filmed during winter season is not sourced
 * "dressed up in a" → "dressed in a"

Live performances and other usage

 * Remove pipe on Top Music Awards
 * "In June 2016, the singer provided live performances at the Top Music Awards in Tirana," → "In 2016, the singer provided live performances at the Top Music Awards in June,"
 * "in July 2016,[55] the" → "in July and the" moving [55] solely to the end of the sentence
 * "in September 2016,[56] and the" → "in September.[56] She later performed the song at the"
 * Shouldn't the Skopje Calling Festival performance be mentioned alongside Top Music Awards per them both being in June?
 * Mention when she performed the song on those shows
 * "in 2016, and on" → "in 2016 and in"
 * "a performance of the recording" → "performances of the recording"

Credits and personnel

 * Pipe Cricket to Cricket (producer)

Track listing

 * Good

Weekly charts

 * TopHit → Tophit
 * None of the Slovakia positions are loading on the website

Year-end charts

 * Pipe PROPHON to International Federation of the Phonographic Industry

Certifications

 * Good

Release history

 * Good

Final comments and verdict

 * until all of the issues are fixed; that took slightly longer than most of your noms! --K. Peake 08:59, 13 April 2022 (UTC)
 * Hi . I solved your comments except for that one where I left a response. PS: I merged the "Music video" and "Live performances and other usage" sections. Iaof2017 (talk) 16:12, 13 April 2022 (UTC)
 * The prose still says various countries for the citation that only backs up the United States, fix this. --K. Peake 16:50, 14 April 2022 (UTC)
 * done. :) Iaof2017 (talk) 17:29, 14 April 2022 (UTC)
 * ✅ now, solid job yet again! --K. Peake 19:55, 14 April 2022 (UTC)