Talk:Bonin white-eye/GA1

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Reviewer: Jens Lallensack (talk · contribs) 21:19, 19 March 2019 (UTC)

I'm currently travelling, I have time to read but have to see when I have time to upload the comments, so I might take a few days longer. --Jens Lallensack (talk) 21:19, 19 March 2019 (UTC)


 * Since 1995 it is known to be a white-eye in the family Zosteropidae, and is closely related to the golden white-eye of the Marianas Islands. – remove "and is" or replace with "that is" to make sentence parts fit?
 * Done


 * suggest to use the correct dashes (the long ones) for ranges (e.g., 3–4 mm) and separating sentences.
 * Done


 * It is not stated in the main text since when it was considered a member of the white eyes. This info is in the lead though.
 * Added


 * nominate – please link
 * Done


 * There are two subspecies of Bonin white-eye, the nominate, formerly found in Mukojimaand Chichijima – that means the nomimate form is extinct? Would specify for clarity.
 * Done


 * The nominate race has – use past tense if extinct
 * Done


 * the think black line – "a" "thin" black line?
 * Is it the only member of its genus? I would explicitly state this.
 * The species as once found – "was"?
 * Fixed


 * and a bird from that island were the type specimen – why past, is the type specimen lost?
 * should have been was, changed


 * and a bird from that island were the type specimen for the species. – this means a bird from the population before its extinction? Would state for clarity
 * Clarified on preceding sentence where that fact sits more naturally


 * Communication – suggest to name it "Vocalisations", as "communication" would encompass much more (visual, etc) which is not mentioned.
 * I think its fine but changed


 * image caption: Calophyllum inophyllum, on Haha-jima, are part of the diet of the Bonin white-eye – but which parts? Fruits of? Seeds of? And wouldn't it be better to show a native plant species anyways?
 * Changed caption. If I ever find an image of a native plant it feeds on will add it. Sabine's Sunbird  talk  19:13, 24 March 2019 (UTC)


 * with vines, grasses, pine needles, rootlets, woven in, – maybe "and rootlets woven in"?
 * Done


 * 19.5–20.5 mm (0.77–0.81 in)x15–15.8 mm (0.59–0.62 in) – I don't think this works with the templates so well. Maybe write like this: "19.5–20.5 mm x 15–15.8 mm (0.77–0.81 in x 0.59–0.62 in)"
 * done


 * in the lead: two eggs. I would add "usually", otherwise it sounds as if it is fixed to this count.
 * fixed


 * Warbling white-eyes may have had some effect on the behaviour of Bonin white-eye, – "Bonin white-eyes" (plural)?
 * fixed


 * The Bonin Islands (Hahajima pictured) have been protected to protect the species – I'm a bit confused; it occurs only on one of the islands? --Jens Lallensack (talk) 16:23, 24 March 2019 (UTC)
 * It was a big reason for the protection. Clarified.


 * Cool, all doneSabine's Sunbird  talk  22:36, 24 March 2019 (UTC)