Talk:Booker T. Washington State Park (West Virginia)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Ceranthor (talk · contribs) 19:32, 28 February 2018 (UTC)

I'm planning to review this in the next day or so.  ceran  thor 19:32, 28 February 2018 (UTC)


 * Lead
 * Too long for such a short article.
 * I think the fourth paragraph could be culled a good amount. Some of the history of the park could be combined into the previous paragraph, but the background of Washington Carver isn't necessary in the lead
 * , thank you so much for this suggestion. I pared down the last paragraph, and combined it with the preceding paragraph in the lead. Let me know if I can pare this down a little further. -- West Virginian   (talk)  15:56, 2 March 2018 (UTC)


 * Prose
 * "He and his wife (a freedwoman) operated a plantation near the park's location," - what's her name?
 * , I added her name to the lead: Mary Barnes Cabell. Thank you for this catch! -- West Virginian   (talk)  15:56, 2 March 2018 (UTC)


 * "Booker T. Washington State Park was located just outside the unincorporated community of Institute, Kanawha County, West Virginia," - "located" is not needed
 * , thank you for the suggestion! I removed "located" per your suggestion. -- West Virginian   (talk)  15:56, 2 March 2018 (UTC)


 * "Situated on 7.43 acres (3 ha) at an elevation of 732 feet (223 m)[1] on the northern edge of the Kanawha River valley" - seems like an awfully long phrase; could probably be separated into two sentences?
 * , I've split this into sentence per your suggestion. -- West Virginian   (talk)  15:56, 2 March 2018 (UTC)


 * "This region of the Kanawha River valley was granted to George Washington, recently returned from fighting in the French and Indian War, following Virginia Lieutenant Governor Robert Dinwiddie's Proclamation of 1754.[18][19]" - should definitely clarify what this means
 * , I've added some context from the Mount Vernon source for the Proclamation. Let me know if this works! -- West Virginian   (talk)  15:56, 2 March 2018 (UTC)


 * Generally, very very good writing. Engaging and interesting, and well-organized.


 * References
 * Check out. All seem reliable.

More comments hopefully later today.  ceran  thor 19:38, 1 March 2018 (UTC)
 * , thank you for your phenomenal suggestions and for your kind words. I appreciate you taking the time to review this article, and I look forward to addressing your further comments as you continue this review. -- West Virginian   (talk)  15:56, 2 March 2018 (UTC)


 * Images
 * Booker T Washington checks out.
 * Lodge picture is good.
 * Rest also look fine.

My last remaining comment, more of a question, is whether the first sentence should read "Booker T. Washington State Park was a former state park near the community of Institute in the U.S. state of West Virginia" rather than "is". Thoughts?  ceran  thor 17:52, 3 March 2018 (UTC)
 * , thank you so much again for taking the time to perform this GAR. And thank you for addressing this issue. I went back and forth regarding this wording in the lede, but I chose to go with “is a former” in present tense because it is in a present state of non-existence (for lack of a better way of phrasing this). Saying “was a former” almost implies that it used to be a former state park. What would you think about restating it as thus: “was a state park.” Please also let me know if you have any other outstanding issues with the article that I can address in the meantime. Once again, thank you for taking the time to review this article! — West Virginian   (talk)  13:01, 5 March 2018 (UTC)
 * , I just wanted to take this opportunity to touch base with you to see if you had any outstanding suggestions for further improvement. Again, I appreciate your selection and review of this article for GA status. I also have another GAN for Morgan Morgan Monument, so if you have time, I would really appreciate your subject matter expertise and guidance for that article as well. Thank you again for taking the time to engage in this GA review. — West Virginian   (talk)  13:44, 7 March 2018 (UTC)
 * Hi West Virginian, I think the article's ready to pass. I'll have to come back later today.  ceran  thor 13:08, 14 March 2018 (UTC)
 * , thank you for your response. It was a pleasure working with you throughout this GAR process! — West Virginian   (talk)  02:10, 15 March 2018 (UTC)