Talk:Bored (song)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 17:11, 27 November 2020 (UTC)

Might start this tonight if I have the time, or else the review will begin tomorrow --K. Peake 17:11, 27 November 2020 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

 * Infobox looks good
 * "from the soundtrack 13 Reasons Why (A Netflix Original Series Soundtrack)." → "from the soundtrack album, 13 Reasons Why (A Netflix Original Series Soundtrack) (2017)."
 * Writing sentence should be the second of the para instead and follow it with production still
 * "The song was released by" → "It was released by"
 * Wikilink lead single
 * "Musically a mid-tempo" → "A mid-tempo" with the target
 * "the lyrics see Eilish" → "the song's lyrics see Eilish"
 * "received generally mixed reviews" → "has received generally mixed reviews"
 * "with many deeming it" → "with a number of them deeming it"
 * "The song has since been" → "The song has been"
 * "and Polish Society of the Phonographic Industry (ZPAV)." → "and Polish Society of the Phonographic Industry (ZPAV), respectively."
 * "An accompanying music video for "Bored" was" → "An accompanying music video was"
 * "In it, It shows Eilish dressed" → "In it, Eilish is shown dressed"
 * Target Nikes to Nike, Inc.
 * "hanging off a ladder that goes on" → "while hanging off a ladder that seemingly goes on"
 * Add a sentence about the video's critical reception
 * "promoted the song by" → "promoted "Bored" by"
 * "it during her" → "it for her"

Background and composition

 * Writing/production sentences should begin this section instead
 * "as the lead single for the album" → "as the lead single from" with the wikilink and remove target on the soundtrack
 * Where is digital download and streaming backed up; Tidal is only streaming? Either find a source that states this or add various citations for the release.
 * "by Billie Eilish, her brother" → "by Eilish alongside her brother"
 * "for 13 Reasons Why, and" → "for 13 Reasons Why and"
 * "as it opened her music" → "due to opening her music"
 * Target key to Key (music)
 * Wikilink tempo
 * Are you sure the stylization is correct for the range that Eilish's vocals span?
 * Identify music critics as music journalists here instead to prevent repetitive wording, though keep the target
 * "that makes Eilish feel contempt for an ex-boyfriend" → "that demonstrates Eilish feeling contempt for an ex-lover"

Reception

 * Can you get more than three reviews since at least four are needed to give a critical overview?
 * "has received mainly mixed reviews" → "has been met with mainly mixed reviews"
 * "saying it was" → "opining that it is"
 * "Writing for Insider, Courteney Larocca" → "For Insider, Courteney Larocca"
 * "the layering in Eilish's vocals" → "the layering of Eilish's vocals"
 * ""Bored" has been" → "Commercially, "Bored" was" because this is a new para
 * "and Polish Society of the Phonographic Industry (ZPAV)." → "and Polish Society of the Phonographic Industry (ZPAV), respectively."

Background and synopsis

 * "climbs up an endless latter." → "climbing up an endless latter in the music video." on the img text
 * Wikilink music video
 * "was released on Eilish's Youtube on" → "was released to Eilish's YouTube on" with the wikilink
 * "with the concept." → "with the concept for it."
 * "sees her climb and hang off" → "sees her climbing and hanging off"
 * "dressed in a blue track suit" → "while she is dressed in a blue tracksuit"
 * Target Nikes to Nike, Inc.
 * "then talked about the videos" → "also talked about the visual's
 * Target antigravity to Anti-gravity

Critical reception

 * "received positive reviews from critics." → "was met with positive reviews from critics."
 * "praised the visual, saying" → "praised the visual, saying:"
 * "And that she" → "She continued, commenting that Eilish"
 * "Writing for Idolator, Mike Wass described" → "For Idolator, Mike Wass described"
 * "described the music video as" → "labeled the music video as"

Live performances

 * Good

Credits and personnel

 * Use so there is the right space between credits and personnel

Charts

 * Good

Certifications

 * Good

Final comments and verdict

 * once the issues are fixed, though reach out if you are confused about any of the changes I requested to implement. --K. Peake 09:25, 28 November 2020 (UTC)
 * Thanks a lot for another review Kyle! I have address all of your requests! Lmk if anything else needs to be done. The Ultimate Boss (talk) 01:09, 29 November 2020 (UTC)
 * ✅ after a very nice job on the response from you, with me only having copyedited one word! --K. Peake 08:13, 29 November 2020 (UTC)