Talk:Born to Lie/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 15:32, 25 March 2021 (UTC)

I will start this review soon! --K. Peake 15:32, 25 March 2021 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

 * Pipe Tim Pagnotta to Sugarcult in the infobox
 * "by American band" → "by American supergroup" with the pipe
 * I don't know if this is necessary. Linking supergroup would create a sea of blue, and Dreamcar themselves does not refer to themselves as a supergroup, despite publications doing so.
 * It does make sense for avoiding that sea somewhat, but I removed the pipe in the body to avoid linking elsewhere. --K. Peake 16:36, 29 March 2021 (UTC)


 * Change debut album to debut studio album
 * Add the release year in brackets instead
 * Pipe Tim Pagnotta to Sugarcult
 * "written by the group's four members:" → "written by the group's four members"
 * "It was released" → "The song was released"
 * The sentence about the lyrical content should be after the ones about the comp and style of the song
 * "It is an upbeat" → "It is an" because the upbeat part is not notable when you mention the actual beat later on in the sentence
 * "it was compared and" → "the song was compared and"
 * "the group's previous single, "Kill for Candy" (2017)." → "Dreamcar's previous single "Kill for Candy"." with the pipe
 * Pipe music critics to Music journalism

Background and release

 * "first studio album Dreamcar (2017)." → "first studio album Dreamcar."
 * "Kanal and Young, and" → "Kanal, and Young, while"
 * "doe the song," → "for the song,"
 * Are you sure the digital download and streaming release in various countries is backed up, as the only download retailer linked to is Amazon US since Spotify is streaming only?
 * I changed the region parameter to "United States" since there was no Apple Music single release, just a pre-order/download option on the album's Apple Music page.


 * "Dreamcar's second overall" → "Dreamcar's second one overall"
 * "It serves as the" → "It served as the"
 * "pre-ordered Dreamcar.[9][10] On the album, "Born to Lie" appears as the third song." → "pre-ordered the album.[9][10] On May 12, 2017, "Born to Lie" was included as the third song on Dreamcar."

Composition and lyrics

 * Img looks good!
 * Swap the Mxdwn and COS refs to be in the same order as the prose
 * "which he said contradicted" → "which he said contradicts"
 * "He compared it to" → "He compared the former to"
 * "leaned more towards" → "leans more towards"
 * "than its predecessor." → "than the predecessor."
 * Wikilink bass guitar
 * Wikilink pre-chorus per MOS:LINK2SECT
 * Wikilink chord progressions per WP:NOPIPE
 * "sings in new style" → "sings in a new style"
 * "just a little"." → "just a little."" per MOS:QUOTE on full sentences

Critical reception

 * Pipe music critics to Music journalism
 * "on "Born to Lie"." → "on the song." to avoid writing the title in both of the first two sentences
 * Avoid using "claimed" per WP:CLAIM
 * "performances provided "enough" → "performances provide "enough"

Track listing

 * Good

Credits and personnel

 * Pipe Tim Pagnotta to Sugarcult

Release history

 * The Digital download is not backed up as being various (see my earlier comment)

Final comments and verdict

 * until all of the issues are fixed, after a rather quick review! --K. Peake 17:24, 25 March 2021 (UTC)
 * – thanks again for the review. I believe I edited the article accordingly and left a couple comments above. Let me know if there is anything else I can do, thanks. Carbrera (talk) 16:25, 29 March 2021 (UTC).
 * ✅ now after I removed that one pipe for you; everything else looks good! --K. Peake 16:36, 29 March 2021 (UTC)