Talk:Born to Make You Happy/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: CallMe Nathan   &bull;  Talk2Me   01:35, 7 March 2011 (UTC)

Lead

 * Nice writing!
 * Thanks! :) - Sauloviegas (talk) 02:45, 7 March 2011 (UTC)


 * Which country is that certification for? If you are going to list one, then list all four
 * ✅ - Sauloviegas (talk) 02:57, 7 March 2011 (UTC)


 * portrayed Spears -> portrays. There has to be a consistent tense used in the sentence
 * ✅ - Sauloviegas (talk) 02:45, 7 March 2011 (UTC)


 * four tours -> you listed three, which is the fourth?
 * Crazy 2k tour. Listed. - Sauloviegas (talk) 02:45, 7 March 2011 (UTC)

Background

 * The song -> since your starting the paragraph, I think it would be more effective if you used the actual title.
 * ✅ - Sauloviegas (talk) 02:45, 7 March 2011 (UTC)


 * Esbjörn Öhrwall played the guitar. Keyboards and programming was done by Lundin. -> try to tie them into one sentence
 * ✅ - Sauloviegas (talk) 02:51, 7 March 2011 (UTC)


 * Try to tie some of these latter sentences into fewer so there isn't that much stop and go.
 * ✅ - Sauloviegas (talk) 02:51, 7 March 2011 (UTC)

Composition

 * Again, try to use less small sentences for better reading
 * ✅ - Sauloviegas (talk) 02:45, 7 March 2011 (UTC)


 * is set in time signature of common time with a moderately -> time, with
 * ✅ - Sauloviegas (talk) 02:45, 7 March 2011 (UTC)

Reception

 * debuted at the first position in Ireland -> atop the charts in Ireland
 * ✅ - Sauloviegas (talk) 02:45, 7 March 2011 (UTC)


 * reached number two in Europe -> on the European chart
 * ✅ - Sauloviegas (talk) 02:45, 7 March 2011 (UTC)


 * number two in the next week -> following
 * ✅ - Sauloviegas (talk) 02:45, 7 March 2011 (UTC)


 * You should mention the other certifications
 * ✅ - Sauloviegas (talk) 02:45, 7 March 2011 (UTC)

Promotion

 * Try to expand the promotion part, it it too basic and just repetitive. tr and make it read better by adding some detail and mixing it up a bit
 * ✅ - Sauloviegas (talk) 03:26, 7 March 2011 (UTC)