Talk:Braathens SAFE Flight 139/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: ---Dough4872 16:25, 13 November 2009 (UTC) Comments: I am placing the article on hold. ---Dough4872 16:25, 13 November 2009 (UTC)
 * 1) "no-one"? I don't think it should be hyphenated in this context.
 * 2) The sentence "During the whole incident, Huseby repeatedly asked for and drank beer" seems redundant to the sentence "During the flight, Huseby consumed several beers." in the prior paragraph.
 * 3) Combine the sentences "At 18:30, the aircraft was out of beer. Huseby made an agreement where he would throw the gun out of the window in exchange for more beer. This was delivered by a civilian police officer."
 * 4) In sentence "Huseby made an agreement where he would throw the gun out of the window in exchange for more beer.", change "where" to "that".
 * 5) The sentence "During the court case, Huseby stated that he wanted help from society, that he wanted attention drawn to his cause, but that he regretted doing this by hijacking." sounds awkward.
 * 6) Are there any pictures of the hijacking available?
 * Thanks for the review. I have fixed up the issues above. Again, I havn't found any suitable images, although for this incident I actually have seen one in a book, but it was over two pages, so it wouldn't be scanable (without wrecking the book, which isn't mine). Arsenikk (talk)  15:35, 14 November 2009 (UTC)
 * I will pass the article. ---Dough4872 01:22, 15 November 2009 (UTC)