Talk:Braun Strowman/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Lee Vilenski (talk · contribs) 09:23, 23 June 2020 (UTC)

Hello, I am planning on reviewing this article for GA Status, over the next couple of days. Thank you for nominating the article for GA status. I hope I will learn some new information, and that my feedback is helpful.

If nominators or editors could refrain from updating the particular section that I am updating until it is complete, I would appreciate it to remove a edit conflict. Please address concerns in the section that has been completed above (If I've raised concerns up to references, feel free to comment on things like the lede.)

I generally provide an overview of things I read through the article on a first glance. Then do a thorough sweep of the article after the feedback is addressed. After this, I will present the pass/failure. I will use strikethrough tags when concerns are met. Even if something is obvious why my concern is met, please leave a message as courtesy.

Best of luck! you can also use the ✅ tag to state when something is addressed.  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs)

Please let me know after the review is done, if you were happy with the review! Obviously this is regarding the article's quality, however, I want to be happy and civil to all, so let me know if I have done a good job, regardless of the article's outcome.

Immediate Failures

 * It is a long way from meeting any one of the six good article criteria -
 * It contains copyright infringements -
 * It has, or needs, cleanup banners that are unquestionably still valid. These include,, or large numbers of , , or similar tags. (See also ). -
 * It is not stable due to edit warring on the page. -

Lede

 * Lede has all sorts of issues of WP:SEAOFBLUE. e.g - former WWE Intercontinental Champion Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski  (talk • contribs) 15:11, 28 June 2020 (UTC)
 * Not sure the debut and nickname couldn't be put into prose... Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 15:11, 28 June 2020 (UTC)
 * Seems a bit like it's in universe. The lede just covers what Braun has done; rather than any impact on the outside world, his strongman career and media career. Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 15:11, 28 June 2020 (UTC)

General

 * We don't need to say that somewhere is particularly near somewhere else, unless that's pertinent. Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 15:38, 28 June 2020 (UTC)
 * When you use an acronym, you need to use the full term first, such as USSSA -> United States Specialty Sports Association. Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 15:38, 28 June 2020 (UTC)
 * Lots of jargon, such as RBIs Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 15:38, 28 June 2020 (UTC)
 * Still lots of WP:SEAOFBLUE in the prose. Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 15:38, 28 June 2020 (UTC)
 * Lots of acronyms not explained actually, such as NAS Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 15:38, 28 June 2020 (UTC)
 * See MOS:NUM, we use fifth/seventh > 5th/7th. Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 15:38, 28 June 2020 (UTC)
 * What is that infobox for? Seems like massive cruft to me. Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 15:38, 28 June 2020 (UTC)
 * (with the first name a reference to Milwaukee Brewers left fielder Ryan Braun) - This should really be its own sentence. Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 15:38, 28 June 2020 (UTC)
 * Quite a bit of cruft here, specifically always mentioning "WWE" or (Bubba Ray Dudley and D-Von Dudley (collectively known as The Dudley Boyz) Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 15:38, 28 June 2020 (UTC)
 * An incredible amount of WP:OL here that needs cleanup Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 15:38, 28 June 2020 (UTC)
 * WP:Proseline is an issue here. Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 15:38, 28 June 2020 (UTC)

GA Review

 * GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):  d (copyvio and plagiarism):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:

Review meta comments
If you can clear this stuff up, it'll be worth a second nomination. Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 19:23, 2 July 2020 (UTC)
 * I'll begin the review as soon as I can! If you fancy returning the favour, I have outstanding GA and FA nominations that require reviewing at WP:GAN and WP:FAC, respectively. I'd be very grateful if you were to complete one of these, however it's definitely not mandatory. Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs)
 * Sorry, I'm going to have to fail this one. In addition to the above issues, there's quite a bit that needs cleanup. For some examples:
 * Paragraphs are very long need splitting
 * OL
 * Needs more subsections
 * WP:PROSELINE - this is the biggest issue.
 * The personal life section is pretty pointless - either needs expansion or culling