Talk:Brave (Joyryde album)/GA1

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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 20:25, 10 October 2020 (UTC)

Will start this review tomorrow --K. Peake 20:25, 10 October 2020 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

 * Where does the body state that recording started in 2018?
 * Removed the recording bit, can't difinitivly prove that production started that year.


 * Replace hlist with bullet points in the infobox
 * Done.


 * Wikilink UK bass
 * Done.


 * Remove venue parameter as that is for live recordings
 * Removed.


 * Remove all caps stylisation from the lead since this is not supposed to be noted for albums
 * Removed.


 * Remove wikilink on studio album
 * Removed.


 * Remove "American record label" introduction to the label since this context is not needed
 * Removed.


 * Target Hard Recs to Hard (music festival)
 * Done.


 * "and features: Mika Means," → "and features guest appearances from Mika Means," with the appropriate wikilink
 * Changed.


 * Remove target on NoLay
 * Removed.


 * "It includes the 2016 song "Damn" (featuring Freddie Gibbs) as a bonus track." → ""Damn" is included as a bonus track, which features Freddie Gibbs."
 * Changed.


 * "distinct genres: Bass house," → "distinct genres of house," with the appropriate target
 * Changed.


 * Wikilink UK bass
 * Done.


 * "The album's themes reflect" → "The themes of it reflect"
 * Changed.


 * "were released as promotional singles:" → "were released as singles in 2019:" with the target
 * Changed.


 * ""Yuck" featuring Gold," → ""Yuck", which features Gold,"
 * Changed.


 * "Ford's collaboration with Skrillex," → "Joyryde's collaboration with Skrillex," with the wikilink
 * Changed.


 * "the debut single of the album;" → "the album's lead single;" with the wikilink
 * Changed.


 * "the announcement of the actual debut single "I'm Gone"" → "the ultimate release of "I'm Gone" as the first single"
 * Changed.


 * "while coping with drug withdrawals" → "around the time of coping with drug withdrawals"
 * Changed.


 * "Three months after..." remove this sentence as you have already wrote about the single and the others
 * Removed.


 * "seventeen months after the album's original" → "17 months after the original" per MOS:NUM
 * Changed.


 * "Upon its release, Brave received positive reviews" → "Brave received positive reviews"
 * Changed.


 * "who noted its attention" → "who noted the attention"
 * Changed.


 * "sound design while saying that" → "sound design, while a few said that"
 * Changed.


 * "most anticipated albums." → "most anticipated albums of 2020."
 * Changed.


 * "The single "I'm Gone" was selected" → ""I'm Gone" was selected"
 * Changed.


 * Target Bass House to Bass house (music)
 * Done.


 * Target G-House to Ghetto house
 * Done.

Background

 * "John Ford uploaded a photo" → "Joyryde uploaded a photo" as needs to be changed on multiple cases, since a lot of this is about his musical career not personal life
 * Will change, though since you've specifically listed when to change it from his real name to his stage name, I'll follow those.


 * "of Owsla's logo." → "of record label Owsla's logo." with the wikilink
 * Changed.


 * "Skrillex later posted" → "The record label's signee Skrillex later posted"
 * Changed.


 * "which teased a collaboration with Ford." → "that teased a collaborative track with Joyryde."
 * Changed.


 * "of an album.[3] Skrillex's record label, Owsla, released the song" → "of an album;[3] Owsla released the song as a single" with the target
 * Changed.


 * "Soon after Ford announced "Agen Wida" he announced his debut album," → "Soon after announcing "Agen Wida", Joyryde announced his debut studio album"
 * Changed.


 * "Ford delayed Brave" → "Joyryde delayed Brave"
 * Changed.


 * Wikilink Twitter
 * Done.


 * Merge the third paragraph with the second para
 * Merged.


 * "Three months later," → "Nearly three months later,"
 * Changed.


 * "Ford announced that" → "Joyryde announced that"
 * Changed, There were multiple instances of this exact wording, which is kinda weird, but I've changed them as well.


 * "the first single from his album" → "the lead single from Brave" with the wikilink
 * Changed.


 * "confused fans as some believed" → "confused fans, as some believed"
 * Changed.


 * "as Ford had announced it" → "due to Joyryde having announced it"
 * Changed.


 * "released as the first single" → "released as the lead single"
 * There were multiple instances of this exact wording as well, so I've hanged them too.


 * "released via Hard Recs, a subsidiary" → "was released via Hard Recs, which is a subsidiary"
 * Changed.


 * Target to Hard (music festival) should only be on "of the same name" text
 * Done.


 * "The release of "I'm Gone" confirmed" → "The release being through the record label confirmed"
 * Changed.


 * "meaning that "Agen Wida" would" → "reaffirming that "Agen Wida" would"
 * Changed.


 * Merge the final para with this one
 * Merged


 * "Ford posted a teaser video" → "Joyryde posted a teaser video"
 * Changed.


 * Wikilink social media
 * Done.


 * "early March 2020 showing" → "early March 2020, showing"
 * Changed.


 * "confirmed the album would feature seventeen tracks," → "confirmed Brave would feature 17 tracks,"
 * Changed.


 * "Ford had released in total under the Joyryde alias." → "John Ford had released in total under the Joyryde alias at the time."
 * Changed.

Recording

 * Img should be moved to the release section while staying on left; I will provide further instructions for the cover sub-section relevant to this
 * Moved.


 * "Braves album artwork" → "Braves album artwork" on the img main text, also wikilink X-ray
 * Done and done.


 * Remove wikilink on extended play
 * Removed.


 * "said that he did not feel like himself and." → "said that he did not feel like himself during this time period."
 * Changed.


 * "hallucinations and suicidal thoughts and put him" → "hallucinations and suicidal thoughts, among other mental issues, and put Ford"
 * Changed.


 * "to finish the extended play." → "to finish the EP."
 * Changed.


 * "before he would" → "before he could"
 * Changed.


 * "but later could not remember making" → "but later could not remember coming up with"
 * Changed.


 * "but he suffered from" → "but suffered from"
 * Changed.


 * "He finished one song" → "Ford finished one song"
 * Changed.


 * The second para should be merged with the first one
 * Done.

Music and lyrics

 * "explores genres including" → "explores the genres of"
 * Changed.


 * "conveying it as a" → "conveying the analysis as a"
 * Changed.


 * "He went on to say" → "Ford went on to say that"
 * Changed.


 * "but what he wanted it to be." → "though he wanted Brave to be good." since this is what he actually is speaking about
 * That makes more sense, changed.


 * "Ford concluded saying" → "Ford concluded by saying"
 * Changed.


 * "Ford makes use of vocals from featured artists and samples" → "Joyryde makes use of vocals from featured artists and vocal samples"
 * Changed.


 * Target Damn to Damn (Joyryde song)
 * Done.


 * Change the bass house genre of "I'm Gone" to house per WP:STICKTOSOURCE, as that is what the ref says and it mentions a bassline separately
 * Done, and I'm guessing I wouldn't link house to "House music" because it already was a paragraph before.


 * Remove target on trap
 * Done.


 * [19] should be solely at the end of the sentence
 * Done, I don't know why I put it there in the first place...


 * "produced by Ford while medicated" → "that was produced by Ford when he was medicated"
 * Changed.


 * "He felt his" → "Ford felt his"
 * Changed.


 * "his life as that is what he felt brought himself" → "his life, due to him feeling that was what brought himself"
 * Changed.


 * "female rap vocals based" → "female rap vocals, based"
 * Changed.


 * Target synth to Synthesizer
 * Done.


 * "The second single "Yuck" is" → "The track "Yuck" is"
 * Changed


 * Remove target on hip hop
 * Done.


 * "and trap music[23] and features" → "and trap music[23], and features"
 * Changed.


 * "Ford was impressed by" → "Joyryde was impressed by"
 * Changed.


 * "It makes use of" → "The song makes use of"
 * Changed.


 * "rather than Ford's" → "rather than Joyryde's"
 * Changed.


 * Wikilink time signature
 * Done.


 * [25] should be solely at the end of the sentence after [24]
 * Done.


 * "over top." → "over the top."
 * Changed.


 * "estimated he only spent nine hours" → "estimated that only nine hours were spent"
 * Changed.


 * "and left the majority of the record" → "and had left the majority of Brave"
 * Changed.


 * "he did not want" → "Ford did not want"
 * Changed.


 * "if he continued working on it." → "if he did so."
 * Changed.


 * "The third single, "Madden"," → "The track "Madden""
 * Changed.


 * Merge this para with the above one
 * Done.


 * Wikilink Method Man and add the song's release year in brackets
 * Done and added.


 * Remove target on house music plucks
 * Done.


 * "It is a mix" → "The song is a mix"
 * Changed.


 * "hip hop and makes use of" → "hip hop, with it making use of"
 * Changed.


 * The Wolf of Wall Street should be italicised
 * Done.


 * "set on a" → "that is set in a"
 * Changed.


 * "arrangement set at a tempo" → "arrangement, with a tempo" with the wikilink
 * Changed.


 * [33][34][32] should be put in numerical order
 * Done.


 * "was good but felt a" → "was good, though felt a"
 * Changed.


 * "by making it" → "by making the song"
 * Changed.


 * "and making the song sound more" → "and leading to it sounding more"
 * Changed.


 * "He did not want" → "Ford did not want"
 * Changed.


 * "in the song as" → "in the song, as"
 * Changed.

Cover

 * Move this to being the final sentence of the release section's fist para
 * Moved


 * "The cover for" → "The cover art for"
 * Changed.


 * "Mexican Painter Frida Kahlo following" → "Mexican painter Frida Kahlo, taken following"
 * Changed.

Release

 * Retitle to Release and promotion
 * Done.


 * "Ford announced the" → "Joyryde announced the"
 * Changed.


 * Remove wikilink on social media
 * Done.


 * "to be on 3 April via" → "to be on 3 April, through"
 * Changed.


 * Remove target on Hard Recs
 * Done.


 * Your EDM should not be italicised
 * Bit weird seeing as they are an online magazine, but done regardless.


 * "was to be released" → "was slated to be released"
 * Changed.


 * "Ford revealed that" → "Joyryde revealed that"
 * Changed.


 * "before its announcement," → "before the album's announcement,"
 * Changed.


 * Remove target on singles
 * Done.


 * "It was made available" → "Brave was made available"
 * Changed.


 * "on the same day as its announcement." → "on 17 March 2020." to reintroduce the date
 * Changed.


 * "The album was released on digital download stores and streaming services with" → "The album was released for digital download and streaming on the scheduled date, containing"
 * Changed.


 * "Ford's 2016 single" → "with Joyryde's 2016 Freddie Gibbs collaborative single" with the wikilink
 * Changed.


 * Remove target on "Damn"
 * Done.


 * Second para should be merged with the first one
 * Done.


 * "It was composed of" → "The mix was composed of"
 * Changed.


 * "songs by other artists such as" → "songs by other artists, such as"
 * Changed.


 * "The set was later uploaded" → "It was later uploaded"
 * Changed.

Singles

 * "Ford featured two" → "Joyryde featured two" on the img main text and wikilink Hollywood Palladium
 * Changed and done.


 * "being "I'm Gone" which was released as a single" → "being "I'm Gone", which was released as the lead single"
 * Changed.


 * "the song surfaced online," → "the song had surfaced online,"
 * Changed.


 * "its official release." → "the official release."
 * Changed.


 * "official release and launched Hard Recs." → "official release by Hard Recs, launching the record label."
 * Changed.


 * "believed that Ford was" → "believed that Joyryde was"
 * Changed.


 * "Ford's previous song," → "Joyryde's previous song,"
 * Changed.


 * Remove wikilink on "Agen Wida"
 * Done.


 * "was thought to be released as the lead single from Brave;" → "was thought to have been released as the lead single from the album;"
 * Changed.


 * "The song's contrast" → "The latter's contrast"
 * Changed.


 * Dancing Astronaut should not be italicised
 * Done.


 * "depiction of Ford's" → "depiction of Joyryde's"
 * Changed.


 * Target classical to Classical music
 * Done.


 * "praising Ford's sound" → "praising Joyryde's sound"
 * Changed.


 * ""Yuck" was released next on" → ""Yuck" was released as the second single from Brave on"
 * Changed.


 * "2019 and featured 20-year-old rapper Gold." → "2019, with a feature from rapper Gold."
 * Changed.


 * "of Ford's signature style" → "of Joyryde's signature style"
 * Changed.


 * "of the composition." → "of the song's composition."
 * Changed.


 * Your EDM should not be italicised
 * Done.


 * "genres as well;" → "genres alongside trap and hip-hop;"
 * Changed.


 * "Ford's distinctive style." → "Joyryde's distinctive style."
 * Changed.


 * Dancing Astronaut should not be italicised
 * Done.


 * "of Ford's most" → "of Joyryde's most"
 * Changed.


 * "Gold's lyrical delivery solidified" → "Gold's delivery solidified"
 * Changed.


 * "to maintain a sense" → "for maintaining a sense"
 * Changed.


 * Remove the speech mark from the end of this sentence as it is not from any started quote
 * Done.


 * "Peach Gallagher praised the single writing that Ford's" → "Peach Gallagher from Run The Trap praised the single, writing that Joyryde's"
 * Changed.


 * "turns "the party" → "turn "the party"
 * Changed.


 * "Ford released "Madden" as" → "Joyryde released "Madden" as"
 * Changed.


 * "The song played during Ford's" → "The song had been played during Joyryde's"
 * Changed.


 * "Ford wrote that after" → "Ford said that after"
 * Changed.


 * Remove wikilink on The Wolf of Wall Street
 * Done.


 * "On 26 July, he featured" → "On 26 July 2019, Joyryde featured"
 * Changed.


 * "his live set" → "his live set at the"
 * Changed.


 * "The energetic release, described by" → "The energetic single, as described by"
 * Changed.


 * Run the Trap → Run The Trap as that is how it is identified
 * As there are multiple instances of this, I've changed this as well as all the other ones as well.


 * "with Ford's signature" → "that features Joyryde's signature"
 * Changed.


 * "Matthew Meadow of Your EDM wrote about" → "Meadow wrote about"
 * Changed.


 * "mixed with the song's" → "being mixed with the song's"
 * Changed.


 * "that only Ford had been" → "that only Joyryde has been"
 * Changed.


 * "Meadow continued to say the song" → "He continued, saying the song"
 * Changed.


 * "in Ford's repertoire." → "in Joyryde's repertoire."
 * Changed.


 * "The release of the fourth single" → "The release of Brave's fourth single"
 * Changed.


 * "Ford explained that" → "Joyryde explained that"
 * Changed.


 * "to postpone it as he" → "to postpone the release of the song because he"
 * Changed.


 * "the day before its initial release." → "the day before the song's scheduled release."
 * Changed.


 * "was later released on" → "was ultimately released as a single on"
 * Changed.


 * "he wanted no make" → "he wanted to make"
 * Changed.


 * "to add contrast" → "to add a contrast"
 * Changed.


 * "from Ford's live sets." → "from his live sets."
 * Changed.


 * Run the Trap → Run The Trap
 * Changed from previous edits.


 * "in Ford's DJ mixes," → "in Joyryde's DJ mixes,"
 * Changed.


 * "Serrano also described how" → "Serrano further described how"
 * Changed.

Music video

 * "The "Thrill" music video debuted" → "The music video for the track "Thrill" debuted" with the wikilink
 * Changed.


 * "on Ford's" → "through Joyryde's"
 * Changed.


 * [49][48][50][51] should be put in numerical order
 * Done.


 * Wikilink Facebook
 * Done.


 * "who played the" → "that played the"
 * Changed.


 * "before the music video's release." → "before the release."
 * Changed.

Critical reception

 * "Critical response to Brave" → "Critical response to Brave from music critics" with the target
 * Changed.


 * "Billboard's Kat Bein praised it highly," → "Bein praised the album highly,"
 * Changed.


 * "the best the song for its" → "the best song, noting its"
 * Changed.


 * Dancing Astronaut should not be italicised
 * Done.


 * "the anticipation and that the songs" → "the anticipation, while commenting that the songs"
 * Changed.


 * "with Ford's signature" → "with Joyryde's signature"
 * Changed.


 * "Writing for Your EDM, Karlie Powell praised the album" → "Powell praised the album"
 * Changed.


 * "Ford put into the album" → "Joyryde put into the album"
 * Changed.


 * "She said the song "Brooklyn" was her personal favourite," → "Wright said "Brooklyn" was her personal favourite song,"
 * Changed.


 * "Online magazines included" → "Multiple online magazines included"
 * Changed.


 * "Your EDM and Run the Trap wrote about" → "Your EDM and Run The Trap wrote about"
 * Changed from previous edits.


 * "for their respective lists" → "on their respective lists"
 * Changed.


 * "mentioned the album's delayed" → "mentioned its delayed"
 * Changed.


 * Remove target on Billboard
 * Done.


 * "included the album on" → "included Brave on"
 * Changed.


 * "list in an article" → "lists in an article"
 * Changed.


 * "The song "I'm Gone" was awarded" → ""I'm Gone" was awarded"
 * Changed.


 * "noting its exploration" → "with the staff noting the exploration"
 * Changed.


 * Target chords to Chord (music)
 * Done.


 * Remove target on bass house
 * Done.


 * "breakbeats and calling it a" → "breakbeats, going on to call the song a"
 * Changed.


 * "on the Best of 2019 by" → "on the Best of 2019, voted for by"
 * Changed.

Track listing

 * Digital download → Track listing for Brave
 * Changed.


 * Target Isabella Gotti to NoLay
 * Done.


 * Wikilink Freddie Gibbs under writers
 * Done.

Personnel

 * Good

Release history

 * Release formats for Brave → Release dates and formats for Brave
 * Changed.


 * Target Hard Recs to Hard (music festival)
 * Done.

Final comments and verdict

 * but I noticed an issue throughout was referring to Joyryde by his real name too much, kudos for your quick responses so far though! --K. Peake 20:19, 12 October 2020 (UTC)
 * Nice quick fixes, I will now ✅ this! --K. Peake 07:37, 13 October 2020 (UTC)