Talk:Brawl in Cell Block 99/GA2

GA Review
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Reviewer: An anonymous username, not my real name (talk · contribs) 18:25, 26 November 2022 (UTC)

I'll review this. It looks like it's almost ready. An anonymous username, not my real name 18:25, 26 November 2022 (UTC)


 * GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * There are a few small changes that should be made.
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):  d (copyvio and plagiarism):
 * Well-cited and the references look good.
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * Seems to cover as much as it possibly can.
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * No bias.
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * Perfectly stable.
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * All images are tagged correctly and used appropriately.
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * Just a little work needed.


 * See MOS:LQ; there are many lines that would benefit from this.
 * ✅ - 祝好，Sinoam(聊天) 19:00, 2 December 2022 (UTC)
 * The three paragraphs in the lead could probably be condensed to two.
 * I don't think so. Each paragraph focuses on one or two sections. First paragraph is plot and cast, second is production, and third is release and reception. - 祝好，Sinoam(聊天) 18:58, 2 December 2022 (UTC)
 * who is forced to commit deadly violence Deadly violence? Is there a better way to word this?
 * Fixed - 祝好，Sinoam(聊天) 18:23, 2 December 2022 (UTC)
 * Bradley realizes it's a police trap Contractions like "it's" should always be spelled out in any article.
 * Fixed - 祝好，Sinoam(聊天) 18:24, 2 December 2022 (UTC)
 * and picks a fight with multiple guards I'm not sure if "picks a fight" is appropriate tone. Maybe just "fights"?
 * Fixed - 祝好，Sinoam(聊天) 18:25, 2 December 2022 (UTC)
 * the Warden of Redleaf Prison I think "warden" should be lowercase here.
 * Fixed - 祝好，Sinoam(聊天) 18:28, 2 December 2022 (UTC)
 * Zahler named the film Riot in Cell Block 11 (1954) and its director Don Siegel as an inspiration. Shouldn't it be "inspirations" plural?
 * Fixed - 祝好，Sinoam(聊天) 18:29, 2 December 2022 (UTC)
 * Zahler wrote every moment of graphic violence into the script of Brawl in Cell Block 99. Zahler felt uncomfortable with some of the more extreme graphic violence. Perhaps reword to "Zahler wrote every moment of graphic violence into the script of Brawl in Cell Block 99, although he felt uncomfortable with some of the more extreme graphic violence." However, the first sentence is a little odd on its own, as why would someone besides the script's writer have written those scenes?
 * Reworded to "Zahler wrote every moment of graphic violence into the script of Brawl in Cell Block 99, although he wondered if some scenes has gone too far." - 祝好，Sinoam(聊天) 18:32, 2 December 2022 (UTC)
 * "Vaughn remarked" is used right after "Zahler remarked". Maybe switch up the word choice a little to sound less repetitive.
 * Changed to "expressed" - 祝好，Sinoam(聊天) 18:33, 2 December 2022 (UTC)
 * Zahler and Bakshi focused on the blue tones in the early parts of the film Is there a better word choice than "blue tones"?
 * Changed to "blue colors" - 祝好，Sinoam(聊天) 18:36, 2 December 2022 (UTC)
 * Computer-generated imagery is abbreviated as CG instead of the correct CGI. Change the first use, and for the quote, perhaps add [sic] afterwards. I did further research, and apparently the term CG is quite common in the film industry, so I'll let you decide for this one.
 * Not all reception was mostly positive. Remove the word "mostly" here. Also, the examples given appear to be rather positive anyway.
 * ✅ - 祝好，Sinoam(聊天) 18:43, 2 December 2022 (UTC)


 * @An anonymous username, not my real name Done. - 祝好，Sinoam(聊天) 19:01, 2 December 2022 (UTC)
 * Alright, I read through again, and I don't see any significant issues. Congratulations! An anonymous username, not my real name  23:00, 2 December 2022 (UTC)
 * Much appreciated! Thanks for your time. - 祝好，Sinoam(聊天) 03:12, 5 December 2022 (UTC)

Not bad, but a little work is needed. I will place it on hold. An anonymous username, not my real name 19:13, 26 November 2022 (UTC)

Comment from Nineteen Ninety-Four guy

 * Critical reception is dull and could use some work, as it borders on WP:QUOTEFARM. Try to build a narrative out of the commentary/reception on the film. What have critics in general picked up on? What are the main tenets? A bunch of quotes doth not great prose make. See WP:QUOTE and WP:RECEPTION, which includes examples on how to write this section better. Nineteen Ninety-Four guy (talk) 08:29, 27 November 2022 (UTC)
 * ✅ - 祝好，Sinoam(聊天) 18:56, 2 December 2022 (UTC)