Talk:Brazilian jiu-jitsu ranking system/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: GreatOrangePumpkin (talk · contribs) 20:00, 31 July 2012 (UTC)


 * GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * "The Brazilian Jiu-Jitsu ranking system awards a practitioner different colored belts (worn as part of the uniform) to signify increasing levels of technical knowledge and practical skill." - this "awards a practitioner different colored belts (worn as part of the uniform)" is awkward and should be reworded
 * "While the system's structure shares its origins with the Judo ranking system and the origins of all colored belts, it now contains many of its own unique aspects and themes. " - Also a bit awkward. Remove second "the origins"; when exactly is "now"?
 * Particularly the last sentence is very confusing and odd.
 * Unfortunately the prose is generally awkward (eg " the first use of belts" - should be "types of belts", I think), so I put this on hold. Please request a copyedit as I can not continue if the prose is below standard
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (references): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * Pass/Fail:

It's been three weeks and very little's been done on the prose, perhaps this should now be failed. Wizardman Operation Big Bear 16:27, 24 August 2012 (UTC)
 * Then I will fail it. The nominator can nominate this article any time in the future. Regards.--Kürbis (✔) 10:35, 26 August 2012 (UTC)
 * My apologies gents, it was my first time nominating for GA and I was unaware of the importance of asking for a copyedit review ahead of time. Live and learn, right? Hopefully it'll be up to snuff soon. Thank you for your efforts. Buddy23Lee (talk) 23:49, 26 August 2012 (UTC)