Talk:Break My Heart Again/GA2

GA Review
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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 05:37, 18 September 2020 (UTC)

Reunited with you for this review, which I will begin later today! --K. Peake 05:37, 18 September 2020 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

 * Cover art needs alt text
 * Finneas should be listed by his real name under songwriters
 * Why is he not listed as the producer?
 * "as a single on February 9, 2018, for digital download and streaming." → "for digital download and streaming as a single on February 9, 2018." with the appropriate target
 * "It was later re-released" → "The song was later included"
 * "of his debut EP," → "of Finneas' debut EP,"
 * Target ballad to Sentimental ballad
 * "A one-take music video was" → "An accompanying one-take music video was" with the appropriate wikilink
 * "turns around the singer as he sings to about" → "moves around Finneas as he sings about"
 * Add a sentence about the video's reception since you have enough material in the body
 * "performed the track during" → "performed "Break My Heart Again" as part of"

Background and composition

 * Target single to Single (music)
 * "through his record label" → "through Finneas' record label" with the wikilink
 * "It was later re-released" → "It was later featured"
 * "EP Blood Harmony, on August 7, 2020." → "EP Blood Harmony (2019), released on August 7, 2020."
 * Where does the source say he wrote and produced it?
 * "described the track as" → "described "Break My Heart Again" as"
 * "piano appears and accompanies" → "piano appears that accompanies"
 * "can be heard for almost the whole song." → "is heard for the majority of the song:"
 * ""Break My Heart Again" is almost" → "The lyrics of "Break My Heart Again" are almost"
 * "between himself and" → "between Finneas and"
 * "Finneas explained" → "Finneas explained the texting"
 * "admitting his emotions. His voice" → "admitting his strong emotions and Finneas' voice"
 * "He confesses to being" → "Finneas confesses to being"
 * "gets to a point that" → "gets to a point where"
 * "He then realizes if he's" → "Finneas goes on to realize that he may be"
 * "the former to do so." → "the former to hurt him,"
 * "The bridge takes suggests" → "The bridge suggests" with the target
 * "“the one”," → ""the one","
 * "and that their relationship is over." → "and their relationship is over for good."
 * "Finneas then reveals they reunite" → "Finneas then reveals they reunited"
 * "comes to a stop." → "temporarily comes to a stop."
 * "over again with just piano" → "over again, featuring piano"
 * "He says that" → "He confesses that"
 * "the person he loves is" → "his ex-lover is"
 * "and more stripped back." → "and stripped back heavier."

Critical reception

 * "received mainly positive reviews" → "was met with mainly positive reviews"
 * "Kasey Caminiti writing for DuJour" → "Kasey Caminiti, writing for DuJour,"
 * "and "relatable". And further mentions" → "and "relatable", while further mentioning"
 * "and melody, which, according to him, are" → "and melody of the song, which he viewed as"
 * "Writing for Atwood Magazine, Nicole Almeida" → "For Atwood Magazine, Nicole Almeida"
 * "and stated it is" → "and stated that it is"
 * "of O'Connell's supreme" → "of [Finneas'] supreme" since it is confusing for some readers otherwise
 * "and complimented that it has" → "and complimented the"
 * "and the listeners should" → "while opining that the listeners should"
 * "Modestas Mankus, writing for" → "Modestas Mankus, for"

Promotion

 * Retitle to Music video and promotion
 * Wikilink music video
 * The word official is not needed here
 * "while shot in one take in black and white." → "while it was shot in one black and white take." with the wikilink
 * "around the singer as he sings" → "around Finneas as he sings,"
 * "how hard it is of letting go" → "how hard it is to let go"
 * "the singer as he sings, and includes the sounds" → "his singing, alongside the sounds"
 * "was positively received by music critics" → "was positively received by critics"
 * "labeled the visual as" → "noted the visual for"
 * "performed "Break My Heart Again" during" → "performed "Break My Heart Again" live during"

Release history

 * See MOS:TABLECAPTION
 * You need to cite numerous iTunes retailers to verify the release was various

Final comments and verdict

 * after reviewing an article that is showing improvements over your previous work, kudos and this should take a quicker amount of time to pass. --K. Peake 12:04, 18 September 2020 (UTC)

Kyle Peake, I have done everything that you asked! Lmk if anything else needs to be done. The Ultimate Boss (talk) 06:20, 19 September 2020 (UTC)
 * Great job on implementing all of the changes, I did some brief copy editing but will now ✅ this! --K. Peake 12:14, 19 September 2020 (UTC)