Talk:Breaking the Fourth Wall (WandaVision)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Some Dude From North Carolina (talk · contribs) 14:52, 29 August 2021 (UTC)

Hey, I'm going to be reviewing this article. Expect comments by the end of the week. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 14:52, 29 August 2021 (UTC)
 * "due to the fact that" "because" (less wordy)
 * Remove the comma after "Nexus of All Realities connection".
 * "Cumberbatch was removed from the series entirely" – was there a reason?
 * "lifted up" – both words mean the same thing so consider removing "up".
 * Lola VFX is linked twice in #Visual_effects.
 * Entertainment Weekly is also linked twice in the article.
 * Is the tracklisting necessary? The only notable song is already mentioned in prose.
 * "resembles modern day" "resembles the modern day"
 * "a 87% approval rating" "an 87% approval rating"
 * Again, avoid having too many quotes and add more reviews (WP:RECEPTION).
 * "affects" – typo for "effects"?
 * "final two episode" "final two episodes"
 * Remove the hyphen between "theme-song".
 * Remove the comma after "Bowen herself praised the episode".
 * Ping when done. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 03:51, 10 September 2021 (UTC)
 * I have addressed all the small issues. I don't think there is as much need for expanding the reception section but I will take a look at it soon. We should definitely have the tracklisting, like the other episode articles the music section here is a doubling as an album section because there is no way we should have a separate article for this album. - adamstom97 (talk) 04:59, 10 September 2021 (UTC)
 * I agree regarding the track listing existing here because there is more music to the episode beside "Agatha All Along". We touch on a few points necessary for a reader here regarding Agatha All Along, while also discussing the other theme and info from Beck. - Favre1fan93 (talk) 17:59, 10 September 2021 (UTC)
 * I don't think there is as much need for expanding the reception section. The second, third, and fourth paragraphs include only two reviews each. There are twenty-three on Rotten Tomatoes. The issue is that there is an overabundance of quotes instead of more reviews. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 02:17, 11 September 2021 (UTC)
 * I have made some reception updates now. I still think we had good coverage of the critical opinions on the episode, but I have added a little bit extra. Mostly just rewriting the existing reviews to try address your concerns. - adamstom97 (talk) 01:23, 12 September 2021 (UTC)