Talk:Brighton Palace Pier/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 09:36, 15 August 2017 (UTC)


 * I'm not overwhelmed by the two-sentence opening paragraph of the lead, could use a little bit of expansion.
 * I've dropped a bit more in. Ritchie333 (talk) (cont)  11:07, 15 August 2017 (UTC)


 * "over 4 million visitors" four.
 * Done Ritchie333 (talk) (cont)  11:07, 15 August 2017 (UTC)


 * "Carry on at Your Convenience " should have On not on.
 * ooooh, matron Ritchie333 (talk) (cont)  11:07, 15 August 2017 (UTC)


 * I don't know where the discussion is but like "the Beatles", there seems to be a trend towards "the Who" not "The Who" in this setting.
 * I think you're right - fixed. Ritchie333 (talk) (cont)  11:07, 15 August 2017 (UTC)


 * " 85 miles" convert.
 * Oops, forgot. <b style="color:#7F007F">Ritchie333</b> <sup style="color:#7F007F">(talk) <sup style="color:#7F007F">(cont)  11:07, 15 August 2017 (UTC)


 * "3 months " three.
 * Fixed <b style="color:#7F007F">Ritchie333</b> <sup style="color:#7F007F">(talk) <sup style="color:#7F007F">(cont)  11:07, 15 August 2017 (UTC)


 * " it had fallen into a state of repair" disrepair?
 * Oops <b style="color:#7F007F">Ritchie333</b> <sup style="color:#7F007F">(talk) <sup style="color:#7F007F">(cont)  11:07, 15 August 2017 (UTC)


 * "colliding into the " things usually "collide with" not "into".
 * Changed to "colliding with"


 * " in 1901, after opening" both are unnecessary, maybe "two years after opening"?
 * Fixed <b style="color:#7F007F">Ritchie333</b> <sup style="color:#7F007F">(talk) <sup style="color:#7F007F">(cont)  11:07, 15 August 2017 (UTC)


 * Brighton Marine Palace and Pier should be a redirect to this article.
 * Done <b style="color:#7F007F">Ritchie333</b> <sup style="color:#7F007F">(talk) <sup style="color:#7F007F">(cont)  11:07, 15 August 2017 (UTC)


 * "kursaals " what are these?
 * Entertainment / health venues popular in 19th century continental Europe. I've dropped in a definition - we don't have an article (at least in the English Wikipedia)


 * "mined " is piped to "sea mine" which redirects to "naval mine", cut out the middle man.
 * Fixed <b style="color:#7F007F">Ritchie333</b> <sup style="color:#7F007F">(talk) <sup style="color:#7F007F">(cont)  11:07, 15 August 2017 (UTC)


 * "some decking removed as a security precaution. A section of decking was removed in order to prevent access from an enemy landing." is this saying the same thing twice or something else? Either way it's repetitive.
 * This is what happens when you improve articles in random order without paying attention. Fixed. <b style="color:#7F007F">Ritchie333</b> <sup style="color:#7F007F">(talk) <sup style="color:#7F007F">(cont)  11:07, 15 August 2017 (UTC)


 * Not sure there's a necessity to link storm.
 * Fixed <b style="color:#7F007F">Ritchie333</b> <sup style="color:#7F007F">(talk) <sup style="color:#7F007F">(cont)  11:07, 15 August 2017 (UTC)


 * If you insist on linking "barge", do it first time.
 * Don't think we need to do this. <b style="color:#7F007F">Ritchie333</b> <sup style="color:#7F007F">(talk) <sup style="color:#7F007F">(cont)  11:07, 15 August 2017 (UTC)


 * Convert 70-ton.
 * Stupid question - convert to what? Metric tonnes?  brings up an error. <b style="color:#7F007F">Ritchie333</b> <sup style="color:#7F007F">(talk)  <sup style="color:#7F007F">(cont)  11:07, 15 August 2017 (UTC)
 * Does 70 LT work? The Rambling Man (talk) 06:35, 16 August 2017 (UTC)
 * Yup, it does. I think. I like this video, though. <b style="color:#7F007F">Ritchie333</b> <sup style="color:#7F007F">(talk) <sup style="color:#7F007F">(cont)  08:56, 16 August 2017 (UTC)


 * " looks fairly modern " reads a little like a tourist brochure.
 * I've rewritten this bit. <b style="color:#7F007F">Ritchie333</b> <sup style="color:#7F007F">(talk) <sup style="color:#7F007F">(cont)  11:07, 15 August 2017 (UTC)


 * "2000-present" en-dash needed.
 * Aah, Bungle doesn't hit the "fix dashes using a script" after his editing sessions :-P <b style="color:#7F007F">Ritchie333</b> <sup style="color:#7F007F">(talk) <sup style="color:#7F007F">(cont)  11:07, 15 August 2017 (UTC)


 * "or some " shouldn't that be "and" or "nor"?
 * Changed to "nor some"


 * " as the Palace Pier.[1] The Palace Pier suffered a large fire " repetitive prose, and really, really no need to link "fire".  And "suffer a fire" is an odd turn of phrase.
 * Agreed (the link must have already been there when I came across the article and I didn't spot it) <b style="color:#7F007F">Ritchie333</b> <sup style="color:#7F007F">(talk) <sup style="color:#7F007F">(cont)  11:07, 15 August 2017 (UTC)


 * "This was a fraught period for Brighton's piers, with much damage occurring to the West Pier shortly before and after this event" I don't really understand, if "this event" means the fire, how did "much damage" "occur" "shortly before" it?
 * I didn't write this, I just borrowed sources from West Pier. However, since the two fires are not actually related (at least not outside maybe a conspiracy theory website, which wouldn't pass WP:RS anyway), I've removed this. <b style="color:#7F007F">Ritchie333</b> <sup style="color:#7F007F">(talk) <sup style="color:#7F007F">(cont)  11:07, 15 August 2017 (UTC)


 * "In 2004 the " comma.
 * Fixed <b style="color:#7F007F">Ritchie333</b> <sup style="color:#7F007F">(talk) <sup style="color:#7F007F">(cont)  11:07, 15 August 2017 (UTC)


 * " Brighton and Hove Council," missing a "City"?
 * Fixed <b style="color:#7F007F">Ritchie333</b> <sup style="color:#7F007F">(talk) <sup style="color:#7F007F">(cont)  11:07, 15 August 2017 (UTC)


 * "unexpectedly put the pier for sale, with an expected" unexpectedly ... expected... is odd to read in the same sentence.
 * Removed "unexpectedly" (unexpected in whose opinion) <b style="color:#7F007F">Ritchie333</b> <sup style="color:#7F007F">(talk) <sup style="color:#7F007F">(cont)  11:07, 15 August 2017 (UTC)


 * "PizzaExpress" appears to be one word.
 * Well that's what the article's under, though I see it's been challenged and to be honest I agree that the WP:COMMONNAME has two words. (Plus the BBC source used here also uses two words). <b style="color:#7F007F">Ritchie333</b> <sup style="color:#7F007F">(talk) <sup style="color:#7F007F">(cont)  11:07, 15 August 2017 (UTC)


 * "roller coaster" or "rollercoaster"?
 * Since the article has a space, I'll go with that. <b style="color:#7F007F">Ritchie333</b> <sup style="color:#7F007F">(talk) <sup style="color:#7F007F">(cont)  11:07, 15 August 2017 (UTC)


 * Mirrormask -> MirrorMask.
 * Fixed <b style="color:#7F007F">Ritchie333</b> <sup style="color:#7F007F">(talk) <sup style="color:#7F007F">(cont)  11:07, 15 August 2017 (UTC)


 * "The Brighton Marine Palace and Pier and Brighton Beach as viewed from the west" why the italics in that caption?
 * Not a clue - fixed <b style="color:#7F007F">Ritchie333</b> <sup style="color:#7F007F">(talk) <sup style="color:#7F007F">(cont)  11:07, 15 August 2017 (UTC)


 * Could link National Express.
 * Fixed <b style="color:#7F007F">Ritchie333</b> <sup style="color:#7F007F">(talk) <sup style="color:#7F007F">(cont)  11:07, 15 August 2017 (UTC)


 * Works in references should be in italics e.g., The Argus.
 * Fixed <b style="color:#7F007F">Ritchie333</b> <sup style="color:#7F007F">(talk) <sup style="color:#7F007F">(cont)  11:07, 15 August 2017 (UTC)


 * Publisher of ref 5 simply says "Southern", what should it be?
 * Well that's what it's called, our article is at Southern (Govia Thameslink Railway). I've put a link in the ref. <b style="color:#7F007F">Ritchie333</b> <sup style="color:#7F007F">(talk) <sup style="color:#7F007F">(cont)  11:07, 15 August 2017 (UTC)

That's it for the moment. The Rambling Man (talk) 10:06, 15 August 2017 (UTC)
 * - All addressed, I think only converting tons is still an issue. Anything else? <b style="color:#7F007F">Ritchie333</b> <sup style="color:#7F007F">(talk) <sup style="color:#7F007F">(cont)  11:07, 15 August 2017 (UTC)
 * All good, thanks. The Rambling Man (talk) 09:24, 16 August 2017 (UTC)
 * Good show, have an ice cream and stick of rock as my appreciation. <b style="color:#7F007F">Ritchie333</b> <sup style="color:#7F007F">(talk) <sup style="color:#7F007F">(cont)  09:41, 16 August 2017 (UTC)