Talk:Brigitte Boisselier/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Midnightblueowl (talk · contribs) 15:33, 10 January 2013 (UTC)

Right, this looks like a very interesting article. I'd be happy to review it for you, Mark! If you have the time or inclination to return the favour, then I have a page awaiting GA review over at Madeline Montalban; no pressure to do so though! Midnightblueowl (talk) 15:33, 10 January 2013 (UTC)
 * Thanks for doing the review, I appreciate it. I have a couple reviews in process now, but your article does look pretty interesting, I'll keep that in mind. Mark Arsten (talk) 17:26, 10 January 2013 (UTC)

In the introduction:
 * There is a picture of Boisselier, but this is not contained within an infobox. I personally think that these boxes add an aesthetic element to the page, but I'm not sure if there is a strict Wikipolicy insisting that you use one.
 * No problem, I added one. Feel free to suggest different fields, that's all I could think of off the top of my head. Mark Arsten (talk) 17:26, 10 January 2013 (UTC)
 * "scientist and religious leader" - I don't think any real scientist would refer to themselves purely as a “scientist”, they would use "neurobiologist", "experimental physicist" etc, and we should too. Similarly, it should be specified that she is a Raelist leader here; after all, we would not open the article on Pope Benedict by stating that he is a “religious leader”, we would expressly refer to him as a "Roman Catholic leader".
 * Ahh, good point, done. Mark Arsten (talk) 17:26, 10 January 2013 (UTC)
 * "a secret lab" - I'd recommend using "laboratory" here, over “lab”. Furthermore, where was this lab; from the preceding sentences, I was under the impression that it was in France, not the U,S,
 * Good points, changed. Mark Arsten (talk) 17:26, 10 January 2013 (UTC)
 * "the effort received" - how about “project received” ?
 * Sounds good, changed. Mark Arsten (talk) 17:26, 10 January 2013 (UTC)


 * Will get to the next two points later. Mark Arsten (talk) 17:26, 10 January 2013 (UTC)
 * Ok, I've added archive urls to the links and added in a couple pictures. Unfortunately, I don't believe that there are any free images of Rael accessible. Mark Arsten (talk) 20:22, 10 January 2013 (UTC)
 * Thanks Mark, I think that this easily passes GA review; glad to have been of service! Midnightblueowl (talk) 21:47, 10 January 2013 (UTC)