Talk:British Open Championship Golf/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Bridies (talk · contribs) 16:26, 9 November 2011 (UTC)

Review to follow shortly. bridies (talk) 16:26, 9 November 2011 (UTC)

Review

Prose and layout


 * Prose is good and comfortably meets the criteria. I did wonder whether it was necessary to describe the game of golf: you might want to consider ditching “a sport in which players attempt to hit a ball into a hole with as few strokes as possible” and just linking golf. Maybe.
 * There were two reasons behind this decision: first, because I try to break a game down to its most basic core in the first sentence of Gameplay (see Flight Unlimited as another example); second, because I was copying the only other golf game GA, Mario Golf: Toadstool Tour. If you still think it should be removed, I'll take it out. JimmyBlackwing (talk) 15:56, 10 November 2011 (UTC)
 * All right, let's leave it. I was really just casting about for a useful suggestion for the prose... bridies (talk) 05:09, 11 November 2011 (UTC)


 * A couple of minor concerns with the ref section:
 * I'm not sure that GameSpot and GameSpy should be italicized.
 * Fixed. JimmyBlackwing (talk) 15:56, 10 November 2011 (UTC)


 * I'm also wondering why the publisher in reference 18 is given as Game Developer rather than GamaSutra. I understand that the former is owned by the latter but can’t see Game Developer mentioned on the page.
 * It's technically a postmortem that was reposted online after being featured in Game Developer, but I see your point. Fixed. JimmyBlackwing (talk) 15:56, 10 November 2011 (UTC)


 * The same GameSpot review seems to be linked in both the notes and external links section and I think could be safely removed from the latter.
 * Fixed. JimmyBlackwing (talk) 15:56, 10 November 2011 (UTC)

Accuracy/Sourcing
 * Everything is attributed to a source. I sampled some of the direct quotes and the claim regarding the unique use of the St. Andrews course and they check out.


 * My only concern is the claim that "it was generally well received by critics", attributed to a single article, is pushing WP:WEASEL. The article seems to be written by someone from the company which might also raise neutrality concerns.
 * Hmmm. This is problematic, because there are no other sources for that (demonstrably true) sentence. As a defense for the neutrality of that source, I can say that Chey didn't work at Looking Glass when he wrote the article. He did work on BOCG as a programmer, though. Your call. JimmyBlackwing (talk) 15:56, 10 November 2011 (UTC)
 * I was thinking of a direct attribution as with the other material in the reception section, which would nail it down as a writer's recollection. But yeah, it's borderline and doesn't go against the other content in that section. bridies (talk) 05:09, 11 November 2011 (UTC)

Coverage
 * Has all the standard video game sections (I think it's a safe assumption an golf game doesn't need a plot section...) and information well-covered.
 * It would be nice if more weight was given to the game's commercial failure, perhaps some commentary or speculation on why it was so badly received commercially. That said, I realise such commentary may simply not exist for an old golf game...
 * I too would love to have this information, but sadly I don't believe that any citable material regarding it exists. I added a tiny bit more on the company's actions after its release, but I can't link them too directly to this game alone--most sources state that BOCG was only one element of the LGS financial crisis during this period. JimmyBlackwing (talk) 15:56, 10 November 2011 (UTC)
 * OK, I think we can fairly say the article reflects the research. bridies (talk) 05:09, 11 November 2011 (UTC)

Stability
 * No reverts in the last page of history.

Images
 * Standard video game images with acceptable FURs. Also nice use of a free image.

Overall:

*On hold for now bridies (talk) 13:25, 10 November 2011 (UTC)
 * Many thanks for the review. Replied inline. JimmyBlackwing (talk) 15:56, 10 November 2011 (UTC)

Passed. bridies (talk) 05:09, 11 November 2011 (UTC)