Talk:British Virgin Islands at the 2004 Summer Olympics/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Yellow Dingo (talk · contribs) 09:51, 20 July 2016 (UTC)

1A

 * "..included only one track and field athlete." Could be taken to mean their are others in other sports. Remove "track and field"; you say the athlete was a sprinter later anyway
 * "...to the 2004 Summer Games at one". No need to say "at one" as that is already mentioned earlier in the sentence
 * Link "sprinter" to Sprint (running)
 * "The athlete selected was Dion Crabbe, of whom was a sprinter who qualified for the Summer Olympics for meeting the "A" standard time required for his event, the Men's 200 meters." This sentence has a few issues and is clunky to read; I would re-write as "The athlete selected was sprinter Dion Crabbe, an athlete who qualified for the Olympics by meeting the "A" standard time required for his event, the men's 200 meters. It makes the sentence flow, removes some unneeded words (e.g. "Summer" (it is obvious by then that is the Summer Olympics and therefore just Olympics is enough)), fixes some grammar issues and fixes some incorrect capitalisation (Men's → men's).
 * ✅, although I have a slight objection to uncapitalise Men's, as most articles and I believe IAAF capitalise it.
 * Do we really need to mention he was the flag bearer if there is only one athlete as who else could be.
 * Actually, yes; Djibouti during the 2008 Summer Olympics selected their only medalist, of whom did not compete at that Olympics.
 * Link The Brunei National Olympic Committee to British Virgin Islands Olympic Committee
 * ✅. I should never write two articles at once...
 * "was notable for sending" no need for the subjective word "notable" just say "sent"
 * Do we really need to mention he was the flag bearer if there is only one athlete as who else could be (again).
 * Explanation mentioned above.
 * "Among officials, two represented the country, including chef de mission, Dean Greenaway." reword to "Two officials represented the country, including chef de mission Dean Greenaway"
 * Link Dean Greenaway to Dean Greenaway (if it the same one; the article is to do with an Olympian who competed for BVI so I think it is him)
 * "Making his Summer Olympic debut, Dion Crabbe was notable for holding the British Virgin Islands flag at the opening ceremony." - He isn't "notable" for holding the flag; remove and try to incorporate the debut somewhere else
 * ❌ on removing the word "notable". I actually think he is notable for holding it, as is any flag bearer at the Olympics. As for the other issue, I will get to work on it as soon as I return. Good888 (talk) 13:16, 20 July 2016 (UTC)
 * ✅ fixing the issue of the splitting the debut and flag bearer parts of the text. Good888 (talk) 14:54, 20 July 2016 (UTC)
 * "or the 2004 Athens Games' Men's 200 meters," - no need for the "2004 Athens" part
 * ✅, I don't even remember adding that part.
 * "...Men's 200 meters" - Men's shouldn't be capitalised
 * Discussion about it above.
 * "required.[7][2]" Refs should be in numerical order
 * "in the Men's 200 meters" - Men → men (no capital)
 * Discussion about it above.
 * "fifth heat" link to Athletics at the 2004 Summer Olympics – Men's 200 metres
 * "...Men's 200 meters" - Men's shouldn't be capitalised
 * Discussion about it above.
 * "required.[7][2]" Refs should be in numerical order
 * "in the Men's 200 meters" - Men → men (no capital)
 * Discussion about it above.
 * "fifth heat" link to Athletics at the 2004 Summer Olympics – Men's 200 metres
 * "fifth heat" link to Athletics at the 2004 Summer Olympics – Men's 200 metres

Table

 * The table has him finishing 5th when he actually finished 6th

Overall
I am putting On hold for now. - Yellow Dingo&#160;(talk) 10:29, 20 July 2016 (UTC)
 * I will get right to it as soon as I can. Good888 (talk) 12:44, 20 July 2016 (UTC)
 * I believe I have fixed or rebutted all of the issues you have raised. Good888 (talk) 14:54, 20 July 2016 (UTC)
 * I have also just noticed ref 5 redirects to the main Olympics website; can you find an archived version. Also ref 7 should follow the dash style of refs 8 & 9. - Yellow Dingo&#160;(talk) 05:33, 21 July 2016 (UTC)
 * ✅ fixing both issues. I have to say, it is rather annoying that the Olympics website source has gone down; after all, it was working for some time. Good888 (talk) 07:52, 21 July 2016 (UTC)

Pass
Ok I am satisfied this article meets the criteria and I therefore Pass this nomination to make British Virgin Islands at the 2004 Summer Olympics a Good Article. - Yellow Dingo&#160;(talk) 05:31, 22 July 2016 (UTC)