Talk:British industrial architecture/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 12:40, 7 September 2021 (UTC)


 * Many thanks for taking this on. Chiswick Chap (talk) 12:51, 7 September 2021 (UTC)

Comments


 * "the industrial revolution in this" that's typically capitalised.
 * Done.


 * "offers a connection to the birth of the modern world." whimsical, not encyclopedic in tone.
 * Edited.


 * (I ADORE that lead image, I had a dreadful journey back from Reading one day and ended up on the North Circular, passing that building made it almost all worthwhile)...
 * Thanks!


 * "1932–5, " -> "1932–1935, "
 * Done.


 * "once derided, now admired" I don't think this is appropriate for encyclopedia.
 * Edited.


 * "the industrial revolution with" see above. Apply the fix to following instances too.
 * replaced.


 * "of the Iron Bridge across " our article just calls it The Iron Bridge.
 * Fixed.


 * "Bedlam furnaces" linked in the caption but not here? And in the caption called Bedlam Furnaces...
 * Done.


 * "World Heritage site" link WHS. Or even the more specific List of World Heritage Sites in the United Kingdom?
 * Linked.


 * In the image captions, check for overlinking, almost everything is already linked above.
 * Fixed.


 * "1777-9" -> 1777–1779.
 * Done.


 * "Scaling up" not sure how informative this heading is.
 * Edited.


 * "corn mills, malt houses, breweries and tanneries" might consider linking some of the slightly more obscure things, like malt house/tannery?
 * Done.


 * "as war raised grain prices" which war?
 * The French Revolutionary Wars; soon after, the Napoleonic Wars...


 * "Murray's Mills," Murrays' Mills.
 * Fixed.


 * "Murray's Mills (for cotton) on the Rochdale Canal, Manc" see above for Mills, and Rochdale Canal is overlinked.
 * Fixed.


 * "storey Corn Mill" is there a reason it's capitalised?
 * Fixed.


 * "between 1795 and 1805" move that to after the mention of Telford.
 * Repositioned all the dates here.


 * More overlinking in most of the captions.
 * Fixed.


 * "time of king Henry VIII for" remove "king".
 * Fixed.


 * "Chatham Dockyard: from right to" overlinked.
 * Fixed.


 * "1785[13]" full stop before ref.
 * Done.


 * "No. 3 covered slip" do our readers know what this means?
 * Clarified explanation in sentence.


 * "in 1838.[14][11] " ref order.
 * Fixed.


 * "Dockyard, Chatham: No. 3 " Chatham overlinked.
 * Fixed.


 * "pagoda-like" link pagoda.
 * Linked.


 * "Functional design" image captions are full of overlinked terms.
 * Fixed.


 * "Early 19th century" full stop.
 * Added.


 * "for beer" no need to link common words.
 * Fixed.


 * "became the "workshop of the world".[" according to?
 * Disraeli.


 * "Eccles Shorrock's India Mill, Darwen and its 300 foot high Italianate campanile chimney, 1867[19]" full of overlinking, and convert 300 foot.
 * Done.


 * "Cathedrals of progress" again, a little POV.
 * The exact phrase was Gautier's "Cathedrals of the new humanity", cited, but "of progress" captures its meaning pretty closely.


 * "Bristol Temple Meads Station" -> "Bristol Temple Meads railway station"
 * Done.


 * Station isn't capitalised in most of these.
 * Fixed.


 * E.g. Paddington Station -> London Paddington station.
 * Fixed.


 * Check all the image captions, masses of overlinking going on. I won't mention it again.
 * Fixed.


 * "1836–40" 1836–1840.
 * Fixed.


 * "Grade II* listed " normally hyphenated in this usage and link?
 * Done.


 * "1903–4" 1903–04.
 * Fixed.


 * "1903-4" same.
 * Fixed.


 * "1932–5 " -> "1932–1935"
 * Fixed.


 * "combination of Art Deco" overlinked.
 * Fixed.


 * "have taken up the challenge" doesn't feel encyclopedic.
 * Edited.


 * Nothing from the 21st century?
 * All right, added.


 * "Jones, Edgar" en-dash in year range.
 * Fixed.

A nice article, lots to do here, but optimistic. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 15:58, 7 September 2021 (UTC)
 * Thanks! All done. Chiswick Chap (talk) 18:12, 7 September 2021 (UTC)