Talk:Broadway Hollywood Building/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Jonas Vinther (talk · contribs) 22:50, 14 October 2014 (UTC)

Article looks stable, I'll review shortly. Jonas Vinther (speak to me!) 22:50, 14 October 2014 (UTC)
 * Is it well-written? Symbol wait.svg
 * The lead could use some paragraphs per WP:LEAD.
 * Done.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 23:53, 14 October 2014 (UTC)
 * The lead starts off almost every sentence with "The building", this needs to be changed.
 * O.K.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 03:07, 15 October 2014 (UTC)
 * I would suggest changing "as a 10-story building" to "as a ten-story building" and "as a 9-story building" to "as a nine-story building" per WP:NUMERAL.
 * Fixed.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 03:08, 15 October 2014 (UTC)
 * "the annex as 8 storeys" - WP:NUMERAL.
 * Fixed.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 03:08, 15 October 2014 (UTC)
 * "Hollywood Boulevard (between La Brea Avenue and Gower Street, expanded to Sycamore Avenue on August 15, 2007) & Vine Street (between Sunset Boulevard and Yucca Street)—which was designated July 5, 1978" - I suggest re-writing this as all the "" doesn't flow.
 * I have simplified this.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 03:25, 15 October 2014 (UTC)
 * "$2 million (US$31 million in 2014 dollars)" - This wording doesn't flow. I suggest changing it to "$31 million (today's equivalent of $2 million in 1931)".
 * This is the standard format for inflation adjustments. I have used this format in dozens of articles and reviewed dozens of articles in this format.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 03:29, 15 October 2014 (UTC)
 * "The Broadway quickly" - This should be changed to "The Broadway building quickly" as the current wording doesn't flow.
 * Fixed.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 03:31, 15 October 2014 (UTC)
 * "an 8-story modern annex" - WP:NUMERAL.
 * Thanks.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 03:33, 15 October 2014 (UTC)
 * Is it verifiable with no original research? Symbol wait.svg
 * "On April 4, 1985, the building and the entire Hollywood Blvd Commercial & Entertainment District were recognized by the California Office of Historic Preservation with status code 1D in designations 0053-4680-0054 and 0053-4680-9999, respectively. The building is covered by the Mills Act (Contract Number: 53175873 and Case Number: CHC-2005-5690-MA)" - Whole lot is un-sourced.
 * I have found a source for the most important part of that content.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 03:54, 15 October 2014 (UTC)
 * I have found a source for the most important part of that content.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 03:54, 15 October 2014 (UTC)


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 * I would suggest enlarging File:Broadway Hollywood Building sign.jpg.
 * Done.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 03:35, 15 October 2014 (UTC)


 * Review result? Symbol wait.svg
 * The article is not far off from meeting the GA-criteria, but still needs additional work which I have outlined in this review. I'm going to put it on hold and give the GA-nominator a chance to response. Jonas Vinther (speak to me!) 23:25, 14 October 2014 (UTC)


 * , I have attempted to respond to your concerns.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 03:55, 15 October 2014 (UTC)
 * , the article is much better now and meets the GA-criteria. I'm going to pass it, good job. :) Jonas Vinther (speak to me!) 13:43, 15 October 2014 (UTC)