Talk:Brock Bowers/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: JTtheOG (talk · contribs) 03:53, 1 July 2023 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

Hello! I'll be conducting this Good Article review! JTtheOG (talk) 03:53, 1 July 2023 (UTC) (Criteria marked are unassessed)
 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a. (prose, spelling, and grammar):
 * b. (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a. (reference section):
 * b. (citations to reliable sources):
 * c. (OR):
 * d. (copyvio and plagiarism):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a. (major aspects):
 * b. (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a. (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales):
 * b. (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/fail:
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a. (major aspects):
 * b. (focused):
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 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a. (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales):
 * b. (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/fail:
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a. (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales):
 * b. (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/fail:
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Lead

 * MOS:LEADLENGTH says the lead for articles with 15,000–30,000 characters should be two to three paragraphs, so the lead should be lengthened to at least two full paragraphs. You can give a broad overview of the article and then go into detail, mentioning his high school career and more about college. You could also mention he was a four-star recruit.
 * Added to the lead, although it is still only one paragraph.

Early life and high school career

 * Reference 1 does not mention his date of birth.
 * Done
 * Reference 3 does not mention Warren was All-Big West.
 * It comes from his UGA bio which is an external link at the bottom. I can add the bio as an inline citation or leave it as is depending on your preference.
 * "After graduating his mother became a high school math teacher" → "After graduating, his mother became a high school math teacher"
 * Done
 * Add wikilinks to the first mentions of basketball, baseball and soccer, as well as to the first mentions of each of the football positions.
 * Done
 * "receiving a flurry of offers" → "about a dozen offers"
 * Done
 * "Bowers accounted for 1,499 all-purpose yards, set a school record with 14 touchdown receptions" → "Bowers accounted for 1,499 all-purpose yards and set a school record with 14 touchdown receptions"
 * Done
 * "0-10" → "0–10"
 * Done
 * Link COVID-19 pandemic
 * Done
 * "he would stay in shape by running up and down the hills of Napa" → "he stayed in shape by running up and down the Napa hills"
 * Done

Recruiting

 * "sought after" → "sought-after"
 * Done
 * "4 star recruit and the 3rd ranked" → "four-star recruit and the third-ranked"
 * Done
 * Remove the subsequent wikilink of recruit
 * Done
 * Should mention that his recruiting ranking is according to 247Sports.
 * Done
 * "Despite being from the west coast, Bowers wanted to play college football in the south, due to the regions passion for football" → "Despite being from the West coast, Bowers wanted to play college football in the South due to the region's passion for the sport"
 * Done
 * "with the teams tight ends coach" → "with the team's tight ends coach"
 * Done

2021

 * I suggest breaking up the second sentence in half because it's running on.
 * Done
 * Use – instead of - for all the game scores.
 * Done
 * "In his first career game, Bowers led the Bulldogs in receiving with six receptions" → "In his first career game, Bowers led the Bulldogs in receiving with six catches"
 * Done
 * "career long" → "career-long"
 * Done
 * Wikilink Blowout (sports)
 * Done
 * "On October 16, he had another 100 yard performance" → "On October 16, he had another 100-yard performance"
 * Done
 * Reference 19 says he had six catches in the game while article says five.
 * ESPN and CBS gamelogs both have it as 5, replaced the source.
 * "Bowers would have additional multi touchdown performances" → "Bowers had additional multi-touchdown performances"
 * Can you find better sources for Reference 20? Though this isn't necessary.
 * Done
 * It might be important to note he set an SEC championship game record against Alabama.
 * Done
 * Avoid using # per MOS:HASH
 * Done
 * "Bowers would have 5 receptions for 55 yards and a touchdown" → "Bowers made five receptions for 55 yards and a touchdown"
 * Done
 * Can you find a source for his performance in the national championship game that combines the info from References 23 and 24? Again, not completely necessary.
 * "with just over 3 minutes left in the game to extend the Bulldogs lead to 8 points" → "with just over three minutes remaining which extend the Bulldogs' lead to eight points"
 * Done

2022

 * You should mention he was a Walter Camp preseason All-American.
 * I can change (and source) the sentence to mention that nearly every major media outlet (ESPN, AP, PFF, CBS) had him as preseason All-Amercian as it would be odd just to mention Walter Camp.
 * Can you perhaps find better sources for Reference 32? Not necessary. Plus, I understand sometimes there's just not a good source.
 * Done
 * Reference 35 does not mention total rushing yards.
 * Added source
 * "career high" → "career-high"
 * Done
 * "off of a deflection, that some media outlets dubbed" → "off of a deflection which some media outlets dubbed"
 * Done
 * "Georgia would defeat Ohio State 42–41 to advance to the national championship." - Source this sentence
 * Done
 * Add comma after "At the conclusion of his sophomore season"
 * Done
 * "won the John Mackey Award for the nations best tight end" → "won the John Mackey Award for the nation's best tight end"
 * Done

General comments

 * Is there anything that can be added for a personal life section? I saw in one of the sources that his sister plays or played college softball at Sacramento State.
 * He has some notable brand deals (Dick's, Zaxby's, NoBull) that I could mention as well as a girlfriend but I doubt it would be a very good section as most of his family info is in the early life section already.
 * No stability concerns in the revision history
 * Copyvio score looks good

Am placing the review on hold to allow the nominator to address the points raised above JTtheOG (talk) 22:21, 1 July 2023 (UTC)


 * @JTtheOG I believe that I have addressed everything. Newtothisedit (talk) 02:33, 2 July 2023 (UTC)
 * Good work here. I know being asked to make a bunch of edits is never easy. I fixed two of the dates that were still in the numbers-only formatting. Could you make a quick mention of his sister playing at Sac State? After that, it should be ready to go. JTtheOG (talk) 02:58, 2 July 2023 (UTC)
 * @JTtheOG Fixed Newtothisedit (talk) 10:04, 2 July 2023 (UTC)
 * Done. Listing the article now. Congrats! JTtheOG (talk) 18:37, 2 July 2023 (UTC)