Talk:Broken Sword II: The Smoking Mirror/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Czarkoff (talk · contribs) 21:11, 6 February 2012 (UTC)

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Discussion
The only actual issue I can't fix is the 4th one... I don't know how to make it sound "not-disconnected" :( Please help. Best --Khanassassin (talk) 18:03, 7 February 2012 (UTC)
 * As with the first game of the series, your response is amazingly fast. I'll look into it a bit later today. &mdash; Dmitrij D. Czarkoff (talk) 19:39, 7 February 2012 (UTC)
 * Thank You :) --Khanassassin (talk) 19:56, 7 February 2012 (UTC)
 * Please see my changes in the lead. I'm not entirely sure that I did it the best way, but I like it more now anyway. &mdash; Dmitrij D. Czarkoff (talk) 23:32, 7 February 2012 (UTC)
 * Yes, it does sound more "natural" :). Oh, and, can You tell me what do I have to do to make issue nm.10 ,since i see you marked it as undone.... :) --Khanassassin (talk) 08:42, 8 February 2012 (UTC)
 * Literally:
 * can be divided in two parts:
 * and
 * First part is OK, but the second fails to explain who these people are and what the relation between them and the game is. Even worse, as of now the sentence reads as they are alter egos of Charles Cecil. &mdash; Dmitrij D. Czarkoff (talk) 09:38, 8 February 2012 (UTC)


 * So it should be something like:
 * See the part in italics. And as we discuss this sentence in detail, semicolon would be a better separator (then comma) in this case. &mdash; Dmitrij D. Czarkoff (talk) 09:43, 8 February 2012 (UTC)


 * Oh, my bad - I didn't even write that the others were programmers; I added the semicolon too....I think it's done now :)--Khanassassin (talk) 09:53, 8 February 2012 (UTC)
 * Please review my change or better improve it. "were the programmers" is a way too general, I think. I was also a programmer back then, and still am, but I have nothing to do with this game. ;-) Once we've done with that, the article is ready for GA list. &mdash; Dmitrij D. Czarkoff (talk) 10:12, 8 February 2012 (UTC)
 * Your change flows pretty good to me, so I think it's finally ;). So, let's get this done! Best --Khanassassin (talk) 15:42, 8 February 2012 (UTC)


 * Oh, and BTW, I am nearly done with the Broken Sword: The Sleeping Dragon article, so you'll have another article to review very soon ;) --Khanassassin (talk) 09:57, 8 February 2012 (UTC)