Talk:Bronx Style Bob

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A lot of the language in this article needs to be re-written. I mean, the very first sentence sounds straight from a promotional pamphlet: "Bob Khaleel is to say the least an artisan in the mold of the old masters, always on the lookout for the next inspiration. Ready to identify a tone, blend it with a melody, pure emotion, texture, and a song." There a lot of issues similar to this in almost every paragraph. Maybe someone familiar with Bronx Style Bob can make things sound more "matter-of-fact." - 98.226.252.87 (talk) 23:15, 24 March 2010 (UTC)