Talk:Brooklyn Bridge Park/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Sportsfan77777 (talk · contribs) 04:43, 30 October 2019 (UTC)


 * Thank you for taking up this review. Has there been any progress on this nomination? epicgenius (talk) 19:49, 20 November 2019 (UTC)
 * Hi, I'll get to it eventually. If you have someone else who wanted to look at it, let me know and I'll let them take over. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 03:44, 23 November 2019 (UTC)

Lead

 * I think the statement "former industrial waterfront" gets lost at the beginning. This would be better mentioned in its own sentence and/or in the paragraph about the history.
 * ✅ I moved it to the second paragraph (see below) epicgenius (talk) 21:27, 29 November 2019 (UTC)
 * "The site includes Brooklyn Piers 1–6, the historic Fulton Ferry Landing," <<<=== You don't say anything in the lead about what these things are. Aren't the piers the main parts of the park? What do they contain?
 * ✅ Added info
 * Why does the infobox say the park was created in 2008 if it opened in 2010 and construction began in 2007?
 * Are the Empire Stores really a Civil War era structure if they were built beginning in 1870?
 * 19th-century structure
 * Start the second paragraph with when the park opened, then work backwards to the agreement in 2002, and everything else.
 * You could something about what the waterfront used to be in the second paragraph too.
 * Can you stub the "Brooklyn Waterfront Greenway" or just not link it?
 * Unlinked for now, but I think it will be better as a red link. epicgenius (talk) 21:27, 29 November 2019 (UTC)
 * Can you stub the "Brooklyn Waterfront Greenway" or just not link it?
 * Unlinked for now, but I think it will be better as a red link. epicgenius (talk) 21:27, 29 November 2019 (UTC)
 * Unlinked for now, but I think it will be better as a red link. epicgenius (talk) 21:27, 29 November 2019 (UTC)

Port

 * In 1642 ===>>> In 1642,
 * spurring more inland development while neglecting the waterfront. ===>>> spurring more inland development that neglected the waterfront.
 * posed another barrier to accessing the waterfront from Brooklyn Heights <<<=== missing a period
 * By the 1970 ===>>> By the 1970s,
 * until the park began its construction in 2008 ===>>> until construction began on the park in 2008
 * By the 1970 ===>>> By the 1970s,
 * until the park began its construction in 2008 ===>>> until construction began on the park in 2008
 * until the park began its construction in 2008 ===>>> until construction began on the park in 2008
 * until the park began its construction in 2008 ===>>> until construction began on the park in 2008

Planning

 * with hotels and restaurants spread across the length of the park. <<<=== comma before this
 * sell or lease piers 1 through 5 <<< Piers should be capitalized, right?
 * sell or lease piers 1 through 5 <<< Piers should be capitalized, right?

Design

 * operate Brooklyn Bridge Park on 85 acres of the East River waterfront <<<=== How did it get to 85 acres if it was originally 43 acres? I only see a few small additions.
 * The area was originally 88 acres, as mentioned in the "Planning" section. 43 acres were to be developed as a park and 55 acres were to be developed as residential/commercial/office developments. So the 85-acre park is actually smaller than the 88 acres that were originally allocated. epicgenius (talk) 21:27, 29 November 2019 (UTC)
 * To ensure the park is fiscally sustainable throughout the years ===>>> To ensure the park would be fiscally sustainable throughout the years

Construction

 * Subsequently, the Main Street park ===>>> Subsequently, the Main Street Park
 * which became the most expensive home for sale in Brooklyn when it was put for sale in 2017 <<<=== cut the first "for sale"
 * which became the most expensive home for sale in Brooklyn when it was put for sale in 2017 <<<=== cut the first "for sale"

Pier 1

 * houses the classical music venue ===>>> and houses the classical music venue
 * The landing includes an old fireboat house that formerly housed the Brooklyn Ice Cream Factory since 2001 ===>>> The landing includes an old fireboat house that formerly housed the Brooklyn Ice Cream Factory from 2001 to (20??)
 * 450-foot-long (140 m) pedestrian bridge ===>>> a 450-foot-long (140 m) pedestrian bridge
 * the bridge was closed for renovations in 2014 ===>>> was closed for renovations in 2014
 * are a 108-unit condominium development ===>>> is a 108-unit condominium development
 * As originally stipulated in the mater plan <<<=== Is "mater" a word?
 * the bridge was closed for renovations in 2014 ===>>> was closed for renovations in 2014
 * are a 108-unit condominium development ===>>> is a 108-unit condominium development
 * As originally stipulated in the mater plan <<<=== Is "mater" a word?
 * As originally stipulated in the mater plan <<<=== Is "mater" a word?
 * As originally stipulated in the mater plan <<<=== Is "mater" a word?

Pier 2

 * Doesn't this pier also have a roller skating rink?

Pier 3

 * Should the section be called "Pier 3 and Greenway Terrace"?
 * ✅ There are two parts, the Greenway Terrace at the shore, and Pier 3 jutting out into the water. epicgenius (talk) 21:27, 29 November 2019 (UTC)
 * The Granite Terrace features <<<=== I don't think this should be capitalized?
 * the Pier 3 hill is formed by salvaged material ===>>> the Pier 3 hill was formed with salvaged material
 * On October 20, 2016, construction started on Pier 3 itself. <<<=== This is confusing. If Greenway Terrace already opened, what is Pier 3?
 * ✅ per the first point.
 * On October 20, 2016, construction started on Pier 3 itself. <<<=== This is confusing. If Greenway Terrace already opened, what is Pier 3?
 * ✅ per the first point.

Pier 4

 * Should this section be called "Pier 4 and Beach"?
 * Why is the beach highlighted in the title when there are other things?
 * And should "Beach" be capitalized in the title?
 * To all three, I removed "beach". The formal name is "Pier 4 Beach".
 * a former railroad car float bridge that has rotted ===>>> a former railroad car float bridge that had rotted
 * Since opening, native birds have started using the beach. ===>>> Native birds started using the beach once it opened.
 * Is it justified that this is the shortest section?
 * Yes. It doesn't really contain any attractions other than the nature preserve. epicgenius (talk) 21:27, 29 November 2019 (UTC)
 * Is it justified that this is the shortest section?
 * Yes. It doesn't really contain any attractions other than the nature preserve. epicgenius (talk) 21:27, 29 November 2019 (UTC)

Pier 5

 * Okay.

Pier 6

 * Okay.

Main Street

 * Okay.

Ferry

 * new park plantings, improved lighting ===>>> new park plantings and improved lighting
 * a large, 9-by-12-foot <<<=== the second dash shouldn't be there
 * This is part of convert. I can hard-code this conversion instead. epicgenius (talk) 21:27, 29 November 2019 (UTC)
 * This is part of convert. I can hard-code this conversion instead. epicgenius (talk) 21:27, 29 November 2019 (UTC)

Transportation

 * Okay.

Overall

 * Links that don't work:
 * High on tobacco! Warehouse could become performance venue
 * BBP Marina
 * Also BBP Marina
 * Official Website (in the external links)
 * No dab links
 * No plagiarism concerns.
 * There are some parts of various links that are in ALL CAPS when that isn't necessary. That should be fixed.

, The main thing is to improve the lead. Most of the other things are minor. Placing on hold. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 20:57, 29 November 2019 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the review. I think I've addressed all of the issues above. epicgenius (talk) 21:50, 29 November 2019 (UTC)


 * Looks good, passing! Sportsfan77777 (talk) 01:21, 30 November 2019 (UTC)