Talk:Brother, Can You Spare a Dime?/GA1

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Reviewer: MarioSoulTruthFan (talk · contribs) 13:24, 22 May 2020 (UTC)

Infobox
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 * Written: 1930 → should also be in the body of the article, along with a source in the aforementioned section
 * Removed, not verifiable
 * Genre: Traditional pop → same as previous
 * Removed
 * Lenght?
 * There is no canonical track, so no fixed length.
 * Audio Sample: WP:Sample, unless the song is over 5 minutes, no 30 seconds
 * I do not know how to do this, so I just removed it.

Lead
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 * Written by lyricist Yip Harburg and composer Jay Gorney → not mentioned in the body of the article
 * Fixed
 * it is largely in a minor key → composed largely in a minor key
 * done

Background

 * The Great Depression in the United States, started by → The Great Depression in the United States, which started with
 * By 1932 → In 1932
 * The tune → Brother, Can You Spare a Dime?
 * At this point, it wasn't called that.
 * It doesn't sound encyclopedic, perhaps "the piece"? MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 00:18, 24 May 2020 (UTC)
 * Changed to "melody". buidhe 00:57, 24 May 2020 (UTC)

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 * After his appliance business went bankrupt, → after this the first sentence should be writen as if it weren't for it Harburg wouldn't have gone to the music business.
 * Reordered (I think that's what you were suggesting?)
 * One paragraph
 * It would be too long, and deals with two separate topics.

Summary

 * Re-title the section for "Composition and lyrical interpretation"
 * In the second paragraph is always "the song, song and more song". Replace sometimes with "the track" or even with the title of the song "Brother, Can You Spare a Dime?", for example: "Brother, Can You Spare a Dime?" has an unusual structure for a Broadway song.
 * It's not a track as there is no single canonical version. Done some.
 * Understood. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 00:20, 24 May 2020 (UTC)
 * the song jumps → "Brother, Can You Spare a Dime?" jumps → change this one as well.
 * I think this could cause confusion, as the title is also part of the lyrics. Changed to "the melody jumps."

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Performance history

 * Re-title "Live performances"
 * includes recordings.
 * How about "Musical and cover versions"? MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 00:35, 24 May 2020 (UTC)


 * This section should be before the "Parody" one
 * It would be confusing to discuss the reception to the musical without explaining the musical first.
 * Right. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 00:35, 24 May 2020 (UTC)

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 * Angered by...→ move it to the reception portion

Reception

 * Re-title perhaps to "Reception and Legacy"
 * Theater Arts Monthly's → redlink
 * Redlinks encourage article creation.
 * Fine. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 00:40, 24 May 2020 (UTC)

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 * "On the Sunny Side of the Street", "Life Is Just a Bowl of Cherries", and "Happy Days Are Here Again" → year of release of the songs between brackets
 * Michael Lasser write that → Michael Lasser wrote that
 * According to Meyerson and Harburg, the challenge that Harburg → this gets cofusing
 * They write that he → The latter

Parody

 * Fine

Overall

 * You can now address the issues, on hold for seven days. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 15:26, 23 May 2020 (UTC)
 * only missing one thing. Moreover, are you going to add those new sources? MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 12:43, 26 May 2020 (UTC)
 * I will add them after you pass it. Many reviewers don't like it when the nominator adds additional sources during the review. buidhe 17:58, 26 May 2020 (UTC)
 * Add them now, I would rather review them before I pass the article, there would be no need to add more information right after a GA review. Let me know once you do it. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 19:46, 26 May 2020 (UTC)
 * ✅ buidh<b style="color: White">e</b> 20:19, 26 May 2020 (UTC)
 * I made minor changes to the article, see if you are ok with those and let me know. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 10:53, 27 May 2020 (UTC)
 * I have no objection. <b style="color: White">b</b><b style="color: White">uidh</b><b style="color: White">e</b> 19:10, 28 May 2020 (UTC)