Talk:Brudenell Social Club/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Cartoon network freak (talk · contribs) 19:28, 6 November 2016 (UTC)

Lead

 * best known as → which is best known as ✅
 * It is a run as a 'not for profit organisation' → do you mean non-profit organization here? ✅ Yep Cavie78 (talk) 22:48, 13 November 2016 (UTC)
 * two areas - a 400 capacity → two areas—a 400 capacity ✅
 * and a bar area/games room → and a bar area and games room section. ✅
 * It is a run as a nonprofit organisation and retains the → While being a nonprofit organization, it retains ✅
 * a 400 capacity concert room and a bar area and games room section. The games room occasionally holds gigs alongside the concert room. → a 400 capacity concert room, and a bar area and games room section, which occasionally holds gigs alongside the concert room. ✅
 * After falling into disrepair this → After falling into disrepair, this ✅
 * Hyde Park's population, as more students moved into the area. → Hyde Park's population caused by more students moving into the area. ✅
 * In 2004–2005 Noise complaints forced the club to briefly abandon gigs. → Between 2004 and 2005, noise complaints forced the club to briefly abandon gigs. ✅
 * and installed and a new → and installed, while a new ✅
 * 'secret gigs' → "secret gigs". ✅
 * of the 'best live music venue' in → Remove the ' ✅
 * competition and was shortlisted → competition, and was shortlisted ✅
 * 2014 'UK Venue of the Year' → Remove the ' ✅
 * 'Britain's Best Small Venue' award → Remove the ' ✅

Infobox

 * Everything seems to be ok :)

History

 * are not known → are unknown ✅
 * After this plan fell through → However, after this plan remained unmaterialized ✅ changed to However, after this plan failed to come to fruition,
 * car park → car parking car park is correct in British English
 * This clubhouse opened → Subsequently, the clubhouse ✅
 * The Brudenell later → Do you mean the family here or the clubhouse? ✅ I've added a note to the lead to explain that the venue is frequently reffered to as simply The Brudenell
 * The Brudenell later hosted initial meetings by the group → ?? ✅ see above
 * In 2004–2005 → From 2004 to 2005, ✅
 * badges and, in July 2005, hosted the 'Keep the Brudenell A-Live Aid' all-day gig in order → badge and hosted the "Keep the Brudenell A-Live Aid" all-day gig in July 2005 in order
 * club to an entirely public venture – a "publicly open, licensed place that runs as a social enterprise and reinvests its money" → club to an entirely public venture—a... ✅
 * money" – with → money"—with ✅
 * Because the Brudenell reinvests its profits, → As the club's profits are reinvested ✅
 * and showers and upgrading the dressing rooms → and showers, and upgrading the dressing rooms ✅
 * which Clark believes → you've already used "believes" before this; try a new word ✅ changed to "feels"
 * into two areas: a 400 capacity → into two areas—a 400 capacity ✅
 * doors and a bar area → doors, and a bar area ✅
 * working men's club";[2] offering → Replace ; with a normal, please ✅
 * comfortable chairs → "comfortable" chairs (otherwise it may portray FANCRUFT) ✅
 * the world and works → the world, and works ✅
 * owned by the Clark's → owned by the Clarks ✅
 * who can often be found behind the bar at the venue → who is often present at the bar (no need of so many details) ✅ changed to "who is often present behind the bar"
 * Overall, there are too many paragraphs in this section, and many of them could be associated with others as delving on the same idea ✅ I've combined some paragraphs
 * Can you please add an image of something to this section? It's pretty long and reading it without any thumbnails is uncomfortable I'll see if I can get hold of/take a picture of the concert room and/or bar area but I don't have one right now Cavie78 (talk) 23:31, 16 November 2016 (UTC)

Notable performances

 * 'secret gigs' → "secret gigs" ✅
 * It has been described as a → Echoing this thought, the club has been described as a It's not really echoing the previous thought
 * 'Cribsmas' → "Cribsmas" ✅
 * the shows saw the band play through each of the three albums they had released up to that point (The Cribs, The New Fellas and Men's Needs, Women's Needs, Whatever) along with associated b-sides. → the shows portrayed the band performing material from their three albums they had released up to that point—XY...—along with associated B-sides. ✅ I think "saw the band play" is better than "portrayed"
 * In December 2008 the Cribs → In December 2008, the Cribs ✅
 * of their 'Cribsmas' shows, as Live At The Brudenell Social Club → of their "Cribsmas" show as XY... ✅
 * as a music venue.[2] The Wedding → as a music venue; The Wedding ✅
 * who played these → who played at these ✅
 * Leeds band ¡Forward, Russia! also played as part of the celebrations following their brief 2013 reformation → Band ¡Forward, Russia! additionally performed as part of the celebrations following their brief 2013 reformation (the fact they're from Leeds is overfluous)
 * the Brudenell's licencee → why is "Brudenell" italicized, and the correct writing is "the Brudenell" ✅ I have no idea why this was italicised! "the Brudenell's licencee" is the correct form here
 * Image > Set an "and" in the enumeration ✅

Awards

 * In 2014 the Brudenell → Set comma after "2014" ✅
 * Remove commas before and after "with Base Studios in Stourbridge" ✅
 * the 'best live music venue' category → the Best Live Music Venue category ✅
 * Remove the ' from "Rock the House" ✅
 * 'UK Venue of the Year' → same as above ✅
 * for the NME's → Remove "the" This is the correct form. The NME is referred to as "the NME" not "NME"
 * 'Britain's Best Small Venue' → Remove the ' ✅
 * and the Yorkshire & Humberside → and in the ... ✅
 * Set comma after "In September 2016" ✅

Copy-violation

 * 22.5% is OK

Images

 * All OK with images :)

Links

 * No disambiguation links. Good job!

Outcome

 * I've put this for 7 days in order to allow further edits to this article. Best regards and good luck, Cartoon network freak (talk) 18:34, 16 November 2016 (UTC)
 * Thanks very much for the review. Let me know if there are any further issues Cavie78 (talk) 23:31, 16 November 2016 (UTC)
 * Gladly passing! Great job! Cartoon network freak (talk) 20:13, 17 November 2016 (UTC)